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Blobby
Feb 25, 2004, 09:44 AM
THE BEGINNING Part 1
by Blank
Prologue

He walked slowly into Rabbit Town Hospital. He killed a guard, then a nurse, then Mr and Mrs Jackrabbit. But he forgot the children. One, Jazz, was taken to Carrotus, another, called Spaz, to Diamondus and the last, Lori, to Tubeletric. :O

Chapter 1 - Revenge

Years later Jazz set off through the jungle on a planet called Jungelia. He was used to it. That was the place where he met his parents killer. It wouldn't be the last time he would meet him, no way! So, back to the story. He ran further through the jungle when suddenly, the only thing he saw was darkness...

Part 2 coming soon...

Me
Feb 25, 2004, 06:30 PM
It's sort of short.. it's sort of hard to judge it yet.

Blobby
Feb 26, 2004, 10:37 AM
He woke up in a dark, shadowy room where he saw people running about and above him a huge machine.
"Do not worry, rabbit. Your death will be quick."
Suddenly the machine rushed down but suddenly there was a huge explosion.
"I'm not gonna let you die!"Said a looming figure.

Chapter 2-The hero

"I've heard of you many times, Jazz!"The figure said.
"Who the heck are you??!"Jazz shouted.
The figure ignored Jazz and rushed ahead, but was stopped by an angry creature.
"I'm Devan!"

Part 3 coming soon...

Coppertop
Feb 26, 2004, 12:19 PM
Umm ... what can I say? Short chapters, VERY short chapters. Details would be nice.

Wild Angel
Mar 20, 2004, 03:10 PM
Chapters are usually about 1-godknowshowmany pages in length, dear. Most of what I wrote was two or three pages. That's a chapter.... x.X

`Wildie

4I Falcon
Mar 22, 2004, 08:24 AM
Ditto. I try to get my chapter lengths as close to 10000 characters as possible, which seems to always round out nicely to 3 pages per.

Coppertop
Mar 22, 2004, 11:47 AM
Aye. *nods to 4I and Wild*