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Shadow the rabb
Mar 29, 2004, 11:59 AM
ITS A FINE DAY AT RABBIT KINGDOM
and for a change theres no trouble. or is there?
EPISODE 1: SHADOW SHOWS UP
jazz lori and spaz are walking down the street unarmed.
jazz: its been boring sence we beated the *** of that dork turtle
spaz: yehahahyeaha
lori: ... he said yes
jazz: sigh... how is it just me or does that alley look new?
spaz: ...
lori: ahhh...
jazz: hmmm lets move o... *footsteps* what was that?
spaz: aaaaa...
lori: i think it came from the back.
jazz: were unarmed. we cant fight lets run!
spaz: waaaaaaaaaa!!!
*jazz spaz and lori run back towards the palace when*
jazz: what the? turtles!
spaz: hiyaaaaaaaaaaa! *uses karate move and destroys the turtles*
lori: come on hurry!
jazz: yeah lets go spaz! spaz? spaaaaaz! spaz quit it! sp sp spaz?
lori: where is he
*jazz notices a shadow on the ground and looks up*
jazz: look a rabbit!
lori: lets get him
*jazz looks at lori with a question look*
lori: yeah your right we cant reach him from he...
*the rabbit land behind jazz*
jazz: so you kidnapp pp pp wow!
*the rabbit looks like jazz with black fur*
lori: oh my!
jazz: who are you suppose to be?
shadow: im shadow
jazz: i suppose your here to fi...
shadow: hold your horses [and legs] im not here to fight im here to tell you i saw a dorky turtle taking spaz somewhere out of town.
jazz: that guy again?
lori: we will take care of him
shadow: perhaps you would like an alt teamate for your adventure
jazz: anything to find my crazy and cute cousin
THE END
WAIT FOR EPISODE 2: RABBIT DOCKS
Risp_old
Mar 29, 2004, 12:00 PM
That is the first story I have seen here written in the style of a script.
Shadow the rabb
Mar 29, 2004, 12:15 PM
lets move on to
EPISODE 2: RABBIT DOCKS
lets remind ourselves what happend in the last episode
1. dorky returned
2. spaz has been kidnapped
3. shadow shows up and joins the team
4. ENOUGH REMINDS!
at rabbit docks
jazz: oh no! the boats left!
lori: i dont want to swim now!
shadow: we can always use my legboat
jazz: huh?
shadow: legboat a speciel rabbit boat that can use our speed to move as fast as we can. all 1 of us has to do is run on that machine on the boat.
jazz: how long is the way from here to the turtles boat?
shadow: about 30 meters if we hurry we can catch him in no time.
lori: whos gonna run?
jazz: im the fastest i should run
shadow: he has a point there
lori: yes he does
*jazz stand on the machine and shadow and lori sit inside the boat*
shadow: start running!
*jazz starts running and the boat start sailing in very high speed*
shadow: woooooooohooooooooooo!
lori: woooooooooooooooo!!!!
jazz: how much more
shadow: not long! were he... *crash*
shadow: jazz... next time you want to run on the machine... dont!
lori: we made a hole in the ship! lets look inside while we still can!
jazz:ow my head *eats a carrot*
*all 3 rabbits run up to the bridge finding spaz trapped in a cage and 3 big turtle guarding him*
jazz: ack! we forgot weapons!
shadow: here use these! *gives lori and jazz laser pistols* its temporary
jazz: *starts shooting a large turtle while the others take the 2 others*
ok we have them melted!
shadow: we better hurry and free spaz! *uses his laser rifle the melt the bars*
spaz: hahaho!
*jazz leads everyone to the main deck and the ship completly sinks*
jazz: at least we know how to swim
spaz: hahao!
*shadow swims back to his boat and brings it to the rabbit*
shadow: last call to the cruise to turtle island *points to a shell shaped island*
jazz: woa!
spaz: ohhh
lori: huh?
THE END
WAIT FOR EPISODE 3 TURTLE ISLAND PART 1
so it sound like a fan fic its fun to read anyway. :7
Risp_old
Mar 29, 2004, 12:22 PM
I was wondering when there would be a self insertion.
Coppertop
Mar 29, 2004, 12:29 PM
This is different.
Risp_old
Mar 29, 2004, 12:31 PM
It rivals the quality of those stories Bjarni used to make before he was banned.
Radium
Mar 29, 2004, 12:34 PM
I was wondering when there would be a self insertion.
There are exactly two WT stories that don't include the author. I wrote them both.
Coppertop
Mar 29, 2004, 12:36 PM
Why is that not surprising?
Risp_old
Mar 29, 2004, 12:38 PM
There are exactly two WT stories that don't include the author. I wrote them both.
How do I know you were not SeƱor Enchilada?
Radium
Mar 29, 2004, 12:38 PM
I find that including yourself in stories usually leads to natural egotism (and then Radium pulled out his UBER AXE OF BATTLE WINNING<sup>TM</sup>).
Coppertop
Mar 29, 2004, 12:43 PM
HEY! Do I do that? *glarez at Rad*
Radium
Mar 29, 2004, 12:45 PM
It was more directed at Fawriel, Xion, and Master Cheater.
Risp_old
Mar 29, 2004, 12:49 PM
Faw wrote a WT story? Or are you talking about the game he is/was making?
Coppertop
Mar 29, 2004, 01:22 PM
I can see Xion and MC. But I agree with RSPSS: Faw?
KRSplat
Mar 29, 2004, 06:05 PM
I found this story entertaining. Seeing an actual story here is surprising. By the way, RSPSS, scripts were common back in the day (of the JMMB.)
Violet CLM
Mar 29, 2004, 07:20 PM
*cough* SPAZQUEST *cough*
I dislike script stories. I loathe bad grammar and spelling. I hate bad punctuation and capitalization. And giving a character a name like "Shadow" is a waste if he's just going to be an ordinary guy. Call him "Robert the Rabbit". That would be good.
On a side note, new quote!
Fawriel
Mar 30, 2004, 09:11 AM
I agree with CT: Faw?
cooba
Mar 30, 2004, 11:40 AM
SHADOF YOR GARMMER I'TS BERY BOD
4I Falcon
Mar 30, 2004, 02:17 PM
There are exactly two WT stories that don't include the author. I wrote them both.
A-hem. Three.
System of Turbulence doesn't use any of my characters.
I VEEN YOU =D
In any case, narf @ story.
4I Falcon
Mar 31, 2004, 05:05 AM
By the way.
jazz: anything to find my crazy and cute cousin
Uncorrect. Spaz is Jazz's brother. Not cousin. And I really doubt Jazz would call him cute.
Coppertop
Apr 1, 2004, 12:05 PM
That's true. He'd probably view him as an exasperating, slightly annoying sibling at that. I mean, that's how I feel about Nightshade, and she's not even insane.
Strato
Apr 1, 2004, 12:07 PM
On a side note, it's sort of script style, but the actions aren't in italics and light cues aren't in parenthesis.
Fawriel
Apr 1, 2004, 12:11 PM
There are actions?
Strato
Apr 1, 2004, 12:20 PM
Just like there are light cues.
cooba
Apr 2, 2004, 04:18 AM
lets mov unto
EPISDOE 3: TURTEL ISLANT PARR WAN
lets reminde us wat happend in lastest epidosde
1. rabbts swimd to turtel boat
2. they melted have a turtels
3. they freed spaz
4. ENUGH REMINDES!!1
at turtel islant
jazz: here shuld be theirer baze
lori: yes
spaz: waaaaaaack
shadow: we must stelth trogh jungel to find base
lori: and dorky
spaz: wacck let is go
loru: hi there is a palne we can fly abov jungel and kil dorky
jazz: yes
*the enter the palne and fly abov jungel*
shadow:Herwe is tha baze
jazz : ya shaduw now we mus destry it
lori : here ar bombes
*drops bombes at baze*
jazz: huray we destry base
spaz: huhuhuhu
lori: lok its dorky his gona escape
shaduw: i will stop him
*drops down at dorkey*
shaduw: i got him he's cilled
*dopfish shows up by leke and ate shadow*
shadow : aaargh
lori: shadow
jazz : nooo
spaz : dopfish youm
jazz : he death back to home
*aftr a whilie*
lori : ohno our castel is destry
spaz : oyoyoyoy
jazz : it must bee tha lizerds they mus surwive the explise of baze
THE ENDE
WAIT FOR EPISIDE 3 : TURTEL ISLANT PARR TU
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4I Falcon
Apr 2, 2004, 05:11 AM
OMG! COOBA = SHADWO = BJARNI! *shoe*
...What's a light cue again?
Fortunately, I don't think Headcheese is as much of a bother to Jack as... um... most siblings are. /me glares at his irritating* little brother.
* = UNDERSTATEMENT OF THE WEEK POPLEZ =D
Violet CLM
Apr 2, 2004, 11:43 AM
This is so exciting.
Coppertop
Apr 2, 2004, 12:21 PM
Absolutely fascinating. Now what?
Violet CLM
Apr 2, 2004, 07:31 PM
Wait a minute... is it just me, or did the last chapter finish every plot thread introduced so far? Wow.
4I Falcon
Apr 2, 2004, 08:12 PM
I think I have a headache to rival all icecream.
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