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Sulfur
Jan 30, 2003, 03:01 PM
Hey everybody! I just joined the JCF awhile ago, after finding an old copy of JJ2 in a closeout software bin. There appear to be alot of intresting Jazz related stories written here, and I thought I'd contribute :) enjoy

Seven: A JJ2 epic

Part I: Where Do the Children Play
Chapter 1

Rivers of rain fell from a black sky, washing through the ancient grey stone of Carrottus city. Only a few brave souls trudged through the ancient city during the downpour. The weather was symbolic of the aging city, a monument in it's purely ceremonial function in the broad Rabbit empire.

It had been two hundred years since the terrible Rabbit civil war, which had ripped Carrottus in the late 28th century, spurred by 3rd Rabbit-Turtle war. After the fifty year conflict, a new dynasty seized the broken worlds of the rodents, a powerful monarchy seated in the home of the rabbits, Carrottus, and it's capital, Carrottus city.

A brownish pod hovered over the stone streets, a dull blue emitted by it's propulsion system. It bore the red sigil of the imperial power, but it was dimmed by the continual bombardment of frigid rain.

Though preferable to the chaos of internal warfare, the monarchy was unjust, and warmongering. It's power had doubled when it incorporated the Nomic empire, an old ally of Carrottus, into it's ranks. Since then it had been swaggering around, abusing it's weaker neighbors with it's militaristic and technological might. There was a growing tension among the powers of the Southern region of the galaxy.

Still, the rain fell...
A creature in a grey cloak sat in one of the cities towering structures, staring through an open port in the stone building at the stairway to the Holy Palace of Carrottus, where the brown pod, which bore the Prince Saliks IV, heir to the Carrotian throne

Amongst the foreign nations were not only other races, such as the Sectians, the Tuberans, Diamondians, and Medivans, but also foreign rabbit fractions that had broken off during the civil war, would not accept the new rule, and were strong enough to resist attempts at recapture. Lastly there were the Turtles, hidden in there ancient strongholds on Shellion. During the last days of the Last Rabbit-Turtle war, the Turtles prepared a massive metagenic weapon, which would flood most of Rabbit space with dense nebulae, making it difficult to traverse. In one of the desisive battles in the war, a ship carrying the device was shot down, and the metagenic substance created a massive gulf between the Rabbit and Shellian empires, effectively isolating Shellion for the next two centuries. No one knew what progress they had made in that time.

With a regal air, the heir stepped out of the pod, with a royal escort aside him. For him, this would be a great day, his father, King Saliks the III, was about to present a great new warfleet to the people, a testament that Carrottus was as verile and deadly as it had been in gone-by year.
From the stone structure across, the grey cloaked creature drew from the depths of the garb a long, black object, and pushed it through the port that gave him a view of the Royal steps. Placing two elegantly gloved hands on it, he looked through a crystalline shaft.
This was to be a new, glorious age for the Rabbit empire. With the Nomic's at their side, a new, secret expansion campaign would begin, and soon the Rabbits would control all of the quadrant. It was all so clear to Saliks. The universe was *his* right, all he had to do was reach out and grab it.
The creature twitched a finger, and a loud crack tore through the roar of the rain, and a brilliant bright bolt ripped through the night air. He then stood up, and walked away.
Saliks clutched a scorch in his chest and fell in a heap. His aids crouched beside him, their faces obscured.
"My lord," the one on Salik's right began,
"Burn them....burn them all..." Salik said as his head fell back.

And the grey creature walked down the cobblestone streets of the ancient city, fully aware of what he had set in motion.
The last Great War had begun.

To be continued....

KRSplat
Jan 30, 2003, 03:14 PM
Nice. I like your plot so far.

Continue.

Batty Buddy
Jan 30, 2003, 05:09 PM
Que Passa!!!!

Welcome aboard.

I like people who start off with a story... Kind of reminds me of someone...

/\:rolleyes:/\

4I Falcon
Jan 30, 2003, 05:13 PM
Gee, I wonder who? /\:confused:/\ *cough*

Anyway, welcome to the Forums, Sulfur. By the looks of it, you are a very interesting fellow to be reckoned with. I hesitate to say this, but I believe it to be true: your writing rivals that of the great Coppertop. :O *gasp!*

Keep it up! This looks verra goot!

Radium
Jan 30, 2003, 05:26 PM
Originally posted by 4I Falcon
Gee, I wonder who? /\:confused:/\ *cough*

Anyway, welcome to the Forums, Sulfur. By the looks of it, you are a very interesting fellow to be reckoned with. I hesitate to say this, but I believe it to be true: your writing rivals that of the great Coppertop. :O *gasp!*

Keep it up! This looks verra goot!
If I wasn't busy with the RPG of CT's story, I'd write a story... That'd show ya foolish mortals what a <i>real</i> story is.

Blackraptor
Jan 30, 2003, 05:33 PM
My friend and I are the best story writers in the class, but i doubt Grade 6 stories will be good compared to grade 12 stories. Anyways, im proud to be first in my class:)

Great story, and welcome aboard, make yourself at home:)

KRSplat
Jan 30, 2003, 06:11 PM
My writing rivals that of a 2-year-old.

I don't remember my first post, but I think my story was up there.

Sulfur
Jan 30, 2003, 07:12 PM
Thanks everyone :)
I dunno if it rivals Coppertop, I read her story(some of it, it's pretty big, as I'm sure you know) and it's much better. But anyway...

Chapter 2

Grimy trans-steel was the best aesthetic feature of the antiqated transport/cargo ship, as it groaned through the grey Carrotian skies. A rabbit with sky blue fur stared out the window into the bright white sky, not paying any mind to the blaring news report in the holo-tank. In the cramped, budget vessel were a rabble of Sects, Medivans, Fanolintians, and other gruff and dirty races packed close to one another, it was a powder keg of nationalistic hostility. But prehaps that didn't matter, they were all going to the same place, and that was a commonality.
But the rabbit didn't care, either way, all that mattered was that he got to where he was going.

"...the Jardnin ambassador on Carrottus today confirmed that a Jardininan patriot fired the fatal shot at Prince Saliks. Our royal highness is still greiving, but promises that his vengence will be carried out. The High Council is preparing a series of reperations to be paid out by Jardinin, and will be sent there later this week, in other news..."

"So, where are you going to?" A voice right beside the blue rabbit said. He was surprised, who would be talking to him? He turned slowly, looking to see who sat in the maroon seat beside him. It was a Nom, and he was very charachteristic of his race.
Sagging, pinkish skin, blue eyes, and bountiful cybernetic implants. He was young, infact, he was the youngest Nomic the rabbit had ever seen. Not that he had seen that many.
"Pardon?"
"I said, where are you going to." The voice had a deep quality, but was not overly poweful, another common charachteristic.
This was curious, he was not used to random strangers asking him questions. He wasn't used to people at all.
"Ahhh...the same place you are, I guess, Carrottus city." The Nom smiled, almost sadly.
"Just like the rest." This was a very confusing response for the rabbit.
"What's your name then?"
"Nius." The rabbit returned, as the ship rumbled a bit from g-force.
"A curious name for a rabbit on his homeworld."The Nom returned, a superior air about him.
"What is your's then?" The rabbit, apparently named Nius, asked.
The Nom smiled and looked ahead.
"I have no name, and I don't need one."
"That is even stranger, don't you think?" Nius asked.
"Prehaps."

With a mighty thud, the ship landed. Massive buildings filled the windows, as opposed to the grey heavens.

"We've arrived, come on, Nius."

To be continued...

Coppertop
Jan 31, 2003, 07:33 AM
It may, Sulfur. It's certainly more complicated.
I like the suspense at the beginning. Great start.
BTW, if you need any joiners just PM me.

Sulfur
Feb 2, 2003, 06:53 AM
Thanks :) I will

Chapter 3

The large starport was carpeted by a grey layer of asphalt, dotted with flat landing pads, vertical lauch towers, and protective hangars. It was a technological monolith of space-faring science, servicing thousands of starships each day. It was a jewel of economical, scientific and military might in the relatively pristine Carrottus forest.
As Nius and the Nom disembarked from their rugged passage, a vista of towering, gothic structures and shining, steel buildings. In the distance, toward the center of the city, a great crowd could be seen, and the sound of blaring speakers could be dimly heard at such a seperation.
"Why are you here?" The Nom asked, as inquisitive as before.
Nius was abit confused. Why was this random Nom, who he'd never met before, asking so many questions about him?
"I'm getting transport to Diamondus..."
"And why are you going to Diamondus?" Nius didn't awnser, and just kept walking toward the city.
"Why are you here?" Nius returned.
"I am...on the road to find out."

As the unlikely pair continued to walk toward the city, the sound of the rabble of a crowd, and intensly loud speakers grew.
"What do you suppose is going on?" Nius asked.
"It is the king, presenting his new fleet and delivering his ultimatum to Jardinin." Nius looked up, and high in the sky, there hovered seven massive warships, long and detailed, a deep and menacing grey, with dozens of smaller ships moving about them.

"A new fleet? Those ships are huge, big enough to be energy tankers!" Energy tankers where the massive, cavernous starships that transported anti-matter in internal plasma bays, the anti-matter being needed for all anti-matter hyperdrive engines. If they weren't as huge as they were, they'd create a matter reaction and explode.

"Indeed, each of them is two miles in length. And they're engineered for war." The Nom said ominously.
"Impossible, with power that great, they could decimate the galaxy!" Nius turned to the Nom, but when he did, he was gone.
Nius stopped in his tracks. It was flat terrain for miles around...and he couldn't just dissapear.

Heavy smoke filled the small, dark room, giving it a heavy atmosphere. Several creatures lounged about it, but their identities were closely guarded by the shadow infensting the place. A gentle rapping came on the old, wooden door, but the inhabitants of the place paid it no mind, still minding glasses and breathing deeply. Only one did, who rose up and strode to the door. He was tall, tall enough to be a Medivan, but no where near as powefully built, and long, flowing hair and ears belied his rabbit identity. He was clothed in a cloak that dragged along the ground, kicking up the low mist that hung there.
He stood infront of the door, and slowly turned the brass door handle, and opened it. As it did, a flood of the smoke flew out, and hit the rabbit that stood outside in it's face.
"It's you," The tall rabbit said, "come in." The new rabbit was significantly shorter than the other, and must've been intimidated by him. Once the door closed again, the thickness of the air returned to it's former level.
The lounging creatures at last turned to look at the newcomer, three of them in all. By his manner, the new rabbit was very nervous. The tall one ambled to the center of the room, where a small, black canister exuded the smoke that filled the room.
Twisting a knob, it stopped releasing the smoke, and soon it drifted out of the room. Though clearer now, the room was still dreadfully dark.
"Cebe!? Our gas!" One of the creatures, with a femenine voice, protested, moving her propped up feet to the floor with dissaproval.
"Deal with it. Our charge has arrived." Cebe said, with a slight accent, gesturing toward the blue rabbit that stood next to it.
"He's a young one, isn't he?" A creature, this one with a gruff, deep voice, asked on the other side of the room. The blue rabbit didn't respond.
"Hey, are you sure you can handle where you're going, kid?" The third being said, with a smaller, but still definatley masculine voice.
"Shut up, you two. He's paying us fifty-thousand imperial credits."
"He must want to get there pretty bad. You running from the law, kid?" The female voice asked. When the blue rabbit gave no awnser, she stood up and walked infront of the rabbit. She clearly too was of the same race, rabbit, and had reddish-gray fur, from what could be seen in the dim light. She was only slightly taller than the blue rabbit, which was a slight relief to him. She grabbed his chin, looking at him intensely.
"Silent, eh? What's your name?"
"N-nius." She winked at him, then relinquished her grasp.
"Nius? Funny name." A moment passed.
"Ah...I suppose you'll want to see the ship?" Cebe asked. Nius nodded.
"This way." Cebe extended a long, gloved arm towards another flimsy, wooden door. The two of them walked to it, while the female rabbit turned a valve on the canister, reclined again, and smoke once more filled the room.

On the other side of the wooden door was a large hanger, with a large circle in the ceiling, that clearly would open up to facilitate the ship's movement. At the center of the hanger was a sleek, elegantly designed ship, with smooth, organic curves and black, irridescent hull.
"Beautiful. How does it fly?" Nius asked.
"I'm sure a test flight will demonstrate that for you."

Ducky
Feb 6, 2003, 04:41 PM
Welcome to the Tavern, Sulfur.
I'm the local mod/bartender but I'm a slacker and don't do anything<s>except make useless comments</s>.

I actually found some time to read your story, and it's great. I hope you continue(I've read so many great beginnings only to have their authours lose interest), and if you ever would like a joiner, I'd love to.




`Ducky

KRSplat
Feb 6, 2003, 06:15 PM
I don't think I read Chapter Three as closely as I needed too. That did not affect the quality of the story though, keep writing.