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Oct 23, 2003, 03:14 PM
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The Fourth Wall

Prologue:

Some ideas are good. Some aren’t. Then, there are those where ‘terrible idea’ is an understatement. This idea was one of them.

It was a wonderful summer day on Carrotus, the home planet of the Jackrabbits. There was a light breeze in the air, with the Carrotus sun illuminating the large fields of mile-high carrots. Some people would call these monstrosities impossible, but, given the circumstances, giant carrots seem pretty reasonable.
And yet, on such a great day to be outside, one jackrabbit was still inside, tinkering with various inventions. His fur was acid green, hence his name, Acid. He was an inventor for Carrot Corp, a large company on Carrotus that had a monopoly on the electronics market. He was tinkering with a machine that could, if it worked, take jackrabbits to places they had never even dreamed of. At the moment, however, the machine seemed only able to make harmless explosions that turned Acid’s face black in that wonderfully comic way.
Bang.
“Oh, come on!”
Bang.
Electrik, who was Acid’s brother, walked into Acid’s workroom. Electrik’s fur was a deep blue. His fur was electrically charged by a strange incident on Tubelectric shortly after his birth, which was what gave him his name. He was able to manipulate it somewhat, creating bolts of lightning that can shock others. He often did this to Acid, when Acid had forgotten common sense temporarily. “So, what’re you playing with this time, bro?”
“Well, take a look. I’ve taken the current prototype dimension hopper, and I’ve been improving its design. I heard about a ‘Fourth Wall’ a few days ago in the War Tavern. This fourth wall separates a ‘writer’, which is something of a god, from its creations. Naturally, I wanted to look into it,” he grinned, “and here’s what I’ve got so far. It doesn’t work yet, but I think it’ll be ready pretty soon. It’s basically the same dimension hopper, but I’ve given it a bit more power, since that seemed to be one its flaws before,” he indicated the four generators he had gotten from Tubelectric, the electricity planet Acid and Electrik had been born on, “a database, for easier dimension hopping and calculations,” he indicated the Carrot Corp Computer hooked up to the small box that was the dimension hopper, “and right now, I’m working on the wiring. I think I accidentally crossed wires somewhere, so I’m checking it out.”
Bang.
“Not again! Well, I’m inviting a bunch of people to the first test, which is tomorrow, supposing I’m done by then. You want to come?”
“Sure! Sounds like fun!”
At that moment, a tan colored jackrabbit, with an expression of insane happiness plastered on his face bounded into the room, bellowing, “YESH! FOO WANTSH TO TESHT TEH DIMENSION HOPPER!!!”
“No. No, no NO no, no, no, NO. NO. NO.” Acid slapped his forehead. The tan colored jackrabbit was his cousin, who was named Foo. Foo was born with a speech problem, saying s as sh and t as teh. He also isn’t entirely sane, and often refers to himself in the third person. “I suppose Phish is here as well.” Phish is Foo’s brother, but is almost completely different. He has orange fur, and can talk normally, and is not as crazy.
“Well, I had to chase Foo, I didn’t want him getting himself hurt. He saw Electrik walking towards your office, and wanted to go, too. Incidentally, do you mind if I help test the dimension hopper?” said Phish as he walked into Acid’s workroom.
“Heh. Looks like another family reunion, huh, Acid?”
“Sorry, but no, Phish. I’m not sure there will be enough space for you when we test it. And DON’T remind me of what happened on the Hybrid Corsair, Electrik. I haven’t killed you yet, remember?” About a year earlier, Acid had been trying to save Carrotus with a small band of other jackrabbits. They had been lifting off in Acid’s ‘Hybrid Corsair’, when the rest of Acid’s family decided to tag along. Needless to say, Acid was not happy about this.
“Whatever,” said Electrik.
“I understand, Acid,” said Phish, attempting to drag Foo out of the room. Foo, on the other hand, did not seem to understand, and his face had such a downward curve Acid was worried that it might fall off.
There was a small click noise, a small hum, and the computer flashed the word “Standby” in large red letters. “I think I’ve got it. That should be it for today, and the test is here tomorrow at 3:00. See you all then!”



Well, I'm starting story 3, for the third time. Chapter 1 should be up eventually, when I get around to rewriting it.

As to why I'm rewriting it, I gave this to my science teacher for extra credit, and the feedback I got was good, but I obviously needed to rewrite. That's also why I'm explaining everything pointlessly: this story needs to make sense to those who haven't played JJ2.

EDIT: Noticed some changes I had made weren't in here, so I reposted. YAY.
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Last edited by acid; Dec 14, 2003 at 08:14 AM.