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Originally Posted by Coppertop
Sasha and N0 materialized, courtesy of Tiger, wings spread and weapons ready.
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This isn't too major, but it could be interpreted as saying that the cause of their materialization was Tiger with wings spread and weapons ready. Maybe add a "their"?
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Sasha snapped his wings shut and dropped to the groun.
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Ground. Could be misread as groin. There are also a few too many masculine pronouns in this area, making it a little difficult to follow the story at times.
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Irinn, blade in hand, Justiar hiding, the dead Koriph, Sasha and N0
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Ouch. Are Sasha and N0 supposed to be dead or something? Careful.
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and proceeded to fire off two red and white rockets in rapid succession. A quick flip and dive maneuver proved them to be seekers.
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That looks wrong somehow. Maybe a semi-colon...
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He was still swearing as he drew his broadsword. He glanced around for Tephro, and found him standing nearby,
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Again, slightly confusing. Maybe replace Tephro's "him" with some other sort of reference, such as "and found the (spanish cat) standing nearby"?
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