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Originally Posted by SlaYo
...He kicked Louie against the forearms, making him drop the scythes. The fiend reached for a scythes but Louie grabbed him by his upper arm and slashed his neck open with one of the scythes.
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I'm sorry, but this passage just bothers me. The second scythes should be singular, and I think you should use a different word from "scythe" for at least one of the three.
Otherwise, this is an excellent addition.
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