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Originally Posted by Coppertop
Well, that was effectively depressing. *resolves to never express hatred towards jungles* Well done, UR.
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Don't worry, Copper. It's okay to express hatred towards the jungles so long as you can answer "yes" to "are you an artist". I kind of imagine if Hannah had said "yes" to any of those questions the conversation just would have ended kind of awkwardly, like "Oh. Well, okay then. Bye."
Very well done story, Vio. The ending was unexpected yet worked well with the rest of the story. My only critique is that some of the places/ways Hannah talks to herself seem out of place; saying "Shut up" to a bird is understandable, but "If I don't murder Sarah in that time, or she me," feels forced.
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<i>"This picture shows me that the gray bird man is just a bully and picks on smaller birds. Just because he has no friends and takes it out on others smaller than him to look good. I can see in the parrats eyes that it does however have a understanding of the gray bird man and is upset about getting cut."</i> - Speeza on cartoon birds.
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