some people like my story and some don't well for the people that don't like my story or think that i can do better. i would like it if you can tell me where and how i can make it better? the good thing is that it's only a draft it's not the finshed one yet so if you can tell me i will think about changing the story. ps i will only change it if it's a good or a reasonable idea no stuff like i should put sonic or bugs or the death star in it because then i will just keep it the same.