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Originally Posted by Grid
OK, first off, sorry for being a bit too impolite. And yeah, saying pathetic is a bit much. I was sleepy. =p
If you want some pointers for the story, I'll try and help out.
I'm not a fan of the kids stumbling upon an old base. Especially because Devan seemed to be expecting them, which he wouldn't have been. Instead, you should have Devan set up a trap for them, leaving clues behind to lead Jazz to him.
Also, the bit about the vortex isn't great. Jazz is no mechanic or scientist; he wouldn't know how to use the thing. And it doesn't make sense for the kids to have automatically sucked into it, while Jazz has to turn it on for him. What if you just made it a warp point? We have warp points in the game, so it would be easy to explain one in the story.
It wouldn't have taken Devan years to make robotic versions of the trio. Heck, he could have just used a "Mean Gene Machine" to clone them. The final boss of JJ1 was a giant clone of Jazz. Devan could make clones of Jazz, Spaz, and Lori, rather than make robotic versions.
Also, torture scenes are not good openings for a game. This game should be rated E, just like its predecesors. Torturing the hares is not going to land an E, and as a gamer I wouldn't enjoy watching it.
OK, now let's examine Devan's plan. In JJ1, Devan wanted to destroy Carrotus. In JJ2, he wanted to go back in time to erase rabbits from history. And now, you're suggesting that Devan' plan is to.... make clones/copies of the Jackrabbits.... why? All they could do is poorly run Carrotus. They wouldn't be able to destroy Carrotus or eliminate the rabbits. You should come up with a purpose for them.
Again, sorry for the rudeness earlier. I understand that there's a certain way to go about saying things, and I understand that I used the wrong approach.
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ok in answer to your answers about the story they will not be in order ok first devans plan is a two parter 1 well think if devan made a copy of the trio then they can get into all of the secret files for the milltery and all that so then he can know the size of the army and where they are week and all that. and 2 well he's wanted revange on the jack rabbits for so long so if he gets robotic versions of them to destroy the city well everyone will think that it's jazz, spaz and lori that destoryed the city.
ok the torture bit ok i might have gone a bit over bored with that idea but if you can think of a way that looks like they have died and lost there memery then i'm all ears for that.
ok it would of takin devan years to make this three robots because devan knows that every robot that he has made have been desteryed by the trio so he wanted to make these robots so thugh that nothing can destery them or so he thoght.
ok your right jazz is no mechanic but what if spaz see's a shiney butten and he can't resist the urge to push the shiney butten.
the idea of warp points well that might be a good idea but then the kids can't get sucked throw and there is all ways a way to go back so sorry i'm not useing the warp points in the opening but in the levels i might use them.
ok and the last one devan setting a trap how is that any different then what i did he knew they where comeing because in jazz2 he had a time machine so he went throw the machine and he set up a trap.
ok that's all the ideas some are good i will consider useing them.  
oh and no sweat man
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i'm a big fan of jazz first game i ever played.
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