ok gang here's the fix up chapter 1 and i am also posting up chapter2 but they are still drafts and i still need some ideas for what's going to happen right know at this point i would like to thank novastar and n00b. n00b because he gave me the idea of jazz and eva fighting at the start and novastar for letting me use his character. ok heres the two chapters

Chapter 1
After jazz jack rabbit 2 jazz finally thinks it is safe to pop the question to eva and they got married and have kids. Jazz, Spaz and Lori retired after there last adventure and they settled down to life a nice peaceful live in there home. But one day jazz and eva have a big fight and the kids over hear it and they decide to go out side before anything bad happens. They stumble across devan shells old base and they find a machine that was covered with dust and cobwebs. One of the kid’s say they should go home and tell there parents about what they found but the others wanted to use it to find out what it does. The kid that wanted to tell there parents caved in and help them activate the machine. It opened a vortex and the kids got sucked into it. After a few hours jazz and eva make up and they are a bit worried about the kids so jazz gets spaz and lori to help look for them. After 2 days of looking they go back home to where there was a letter for jazz. Jazz opens the letter it is from devan shell in it is a micro disc that jazz puts in his pc and it pops up with a video and devan says: well jazz long time no see didn’t expect to see me again did you. Well jazz if you ever want to see your kids again you must come to me but you will never find me hahahaha if you don’t get to me in 5 days your kids are goner’s hahahaha. Then the message stops. Jazz is (-) off because of what he saw. Then he says you know what that means right guys. Spaz and Lori nod there heads it’s out of retirement for one last adventure. Jazz runs and gets changed and breaks out his old blaster. Spaz and Lori do the same. Then the adventure begins. They get to Devan’s lab and they find one of jazz’s kids dolls next to the machine and jazz instantly knows what happened they must have been playing with the machine and they got sucked into it. So jazz says we need a plan if we are going to get this working. But jazz didn’t see spaz next to the machine and he saw a shiny button and he just couldn’t resist the urge to push it. When he does it starts to open the vortex up again and jazz and lori turn to face spaz and there mouths a wide open in disbelieve then spaz says what there was a shiny button. Then the vortex fully forms. They then get sucked right into it but they get knocked out as they exit it. When they wake up they are strapped to a table and then devan comes out of the shadows and says well jazz didn’t expect to see me again did you. Jazz you want to see your children don’t you jazz then says offcourse I want to see my children where are they. Then a cage came down form the ceiling with jazz’s kids in it. What are you going to do to them? Then devan says Oh you will see jazz hahahaha you will see. Then a saw blade came out of the wall and moved very slowly towards the cage. Jazz if you don’t want to see your kids harmed I suggest that you give me your blaster. Jazz says what do you want my blaster for Devan says why else for a nice trophy. Jazz refuse the first two times. The first time he says no this was my father’s blaster you won’t get it. Devan then says oh really he pushes a button the blade moves a little bit faster. Then Devan says I would give it to me know if I where you hahaha. The second time jazz says no I would let you lay a hand on it. Devan says well that’s too bad because well one more push of a button and it bye-bye rabbit kids hahaha. This is your last chance the blaster or the kids your call jazz you got 10 seconds. Jazz then starts to sweat because he is stuck with a though call. Just as devan is about to push the button jazz gives him the blaster he then push’s the other button to stop the blade. He then says a very good move jazz but not the best you have come up with. Jazz looks confused because he doesn’t understand by what he means. Spaz and lori try to snap him out of his daze but there’s nothing they can do. Until devan puts it onto his work bench then jazz understands what he means by not the best move he could of made because then he sees devan made the saw blade cuts the blaster in half. Jazz let’s out a scream of anger as he tries to break out of the restrains on the table but then devan puts in his backpack a little one hand one and says if this will shout you up take this one. Then devan pulls a switch and the kids are released form there cage but before they can reach there dad the vortex opens up and sucks them back throw it jazz is up set and mad and angry he is filled with rage he wants to kill devan with no mercy. But then the kids are back home and they call for there mum she hugs them and ask where’s your farther they don’t want to answer but then another vortex opens and out pops jazz, spaz and lori. But jazz, spaz and Lori are watching all of this on a monitor still on the lab table. Then Lori ask’s if were here who are they. Devan then says these are the reason you haven’t heard from me in years a perfect robotic version of you three. The three of them gasped. But then spaz says ah then what about us if they are there then what will happen to us. Devan then says well I think you can guess what happens to you three hahahaha. He then throw a lever then electricity start to flow throw the three rabbit’s shocking them to a crisp but they are not dead and but devan doesn’t know this. He then called his henchmen to take the three of them and dump them in the forest. So they are taken to the forest where they lie for about 6 hours until they wake up. But there is one problem they can’t remember a thing excepted there name and that they are brothers and sister. End of chapter 1