I didn't really want to come with something negative as your first comment but it doesn't look like people have anything else to say but to nitpick your choice of forum.
It's admittedly kind of boring. You should introduce the characters before starting on the first chapter and make the plot more appalling.
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YOU AND ME BABY ARE NOTHING BUT MAMMALS LA LA LALAL LA LA ON THE DISCOVERY CHANNEL!!!
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