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(-), you found every little thing wrong didn't you?
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Hah, sorry if I was overly harsh. It's a habit; I proofread.
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Add Psi as they don't have reproductive organs.
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It's different than reproducing. If I understand, they do reproduce, it's just vampire style.
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Anyways, aside from the criticism, was the story still good so far?
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It has potential, but is confusing in places. Something it really needs is more "initializing shots", describing where the character is and how he's doing, so to speak. In movies, these are the shots that pan out over a room before showing what's going on inside.
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<i>"This picture shows me that the gray bird man is just a bully and picks on smaller birds. Just because he has no friends and takes it out on others smaller than him to look good. I can see in the parrats eyes that it does however have a understanding of the gray bird man and is upset about getting cut."</i> - Speeza on cartoon birds.
Last edited by Radium; Jul 2, 2007 at 06:37 PM.
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