Hmm, what strikes out to me most of all are things like proportions and stuff that pretty much any given beginner artist makes mistakes on. However, this is way better than your mouse-drawn stuff, so I'm very pleased that you've submitted pencil work.

To begin, proportions. If you want to get technical about things, this'll be a good start: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Body_proportions However, I do NOT recommend drawing with a print out of this thing in hand. You should instead skim over it, lock a few interesting details in your brain, and draw things as you naturally see them. You'll end up practicing your intuition more and things will be easier in the long run. Look at and study Vitruvian Man (ignore the (-)(-)(-)(-)(-)), and you'll see how big things are in relation to eachother.

As far as your skeletons go, they're inacurate as Rad said. Study the skeleton struture, http://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedi...ch-drawing.jpg , draw it once or twice, and you'll be a master. It's really not overly important. If you don't care, then don't draw skeletons.

The only thing that I really see you needing work in is the skull. The hero guy has a completely circular face. The skull works a lot differently than that, so I'd say focus on that for right now. On that note, fingers too. He's got none =(

Other notable things, his back is facing us yes? Well how in the world did he manage to slice somebody behind himself and bring it around in front in such a clean motion? It's exceedingly unnatural looking. Especially with that grip



For future references, those shields go on the forearm and not the elbow. Otherwise, the person wouldn't be able to bend their arm. Also on the arm that you can see the muscles, you forgot my good ol' friend the deltoid!

That's as far as that goes. To summerize :

Study the skeletal system, particularly the skull.
Study proportions. Learning construction can and will help. If you're already doing that, then great.
Posing, such as not having him slice enemies from behind and weird grips.