I like it so far, there's only one part that I found rather nonsensical:
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The Baron laughed a little, which was always unnerving, it was like ‘he he heh ha ha haa.’ It was quite chilling, if led could laugh, that would be the noise it would make.
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I'm not sure why you used lead as your example, but ah well.
Also, on the second chapter, a little cleanup would make it easier to read, but overall I like the progress you've made.
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