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Originally Posted by Radium
Due to your choice of forum, I'm unsure if I'm supposed to do the Art Forum thing where I write a two page long critique or the War Tavern thing where I ignore the thread entirely and spam ToU.
Seriously, though, this is actually pretty good. Properly constructed short stories are something that is incredibly underdone. I agree with Slay about the idea being both interesting and well executed, especially with the "police report" sounding bits going in reverse chronological order from the journal entries.
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... huzzah!
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Originally Posted by Radium
If I may make a suggestion about this, though, the more traditional method of releasing things is to put the best ones first and last, with the mediocre ones as "filler" in the middle. That way you both grab people's attention (which makes them read the rest) and make sure that they walk away hearing a very good story last, giving them a positive overall impression. They'll be more likely to say "Those were good" rather than "The first ones were good, but the later ones weren't".
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Ah, I see your point. I'll keep that in mind in the future.
For this, though, I went by the logic that the first one will be the one everyone reads, and then the interest slowly decreases anyway...
In fact, I didn't plan to translate the worst of the stories at all if there wasn't enough demand for it... Hmmm.
I might skip to the second-best, I guess.
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Originally Posted by The SlaYeR
I don't know why, but it felt more 'right' in German.
Very nice read and a nice flow.
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That's good to hear. ^^
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