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The SlaYeR

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The SlaYeR is doing well so far

Aug 25, 2008, 12:39 PM
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n0 AND ALISTER!!!

I noticed that there is an inconsistancy in the story.
The end of n0's chapter tells of how Louie Greenthorpe stood by the edge of Castle Greenthorpe, ready to make the jump.

Dear n0, if you could make a small adjustment and make it so that he sees tire tracks and goes on his way to question a demon. That would work much better.
Sorry to bother you guys.
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