unsaid by Dev:

1) Be consistent with page marking... really. Really.

2) Left arms and hands in general! Just look at Fawriel's left hand in that last panel. Is he a witch? Eirrukovi's left arm is huge and wide when she knocks on the door, and has a pretty long left arm when she trys to get out of the... stairs? What is it anyway? And on the panel right after that Fawriel's left arm is quite tiny, with a smaller hand. Pay more attention to left arms.

3) Fawriel's pants. I don't know if this is the way you draw all your pants, but man, the part where both legs merge (I'm no pants term professional) supposed to be about 1/3~1/4 of the pants, where here it's about 1/6 of it. I can tell my eyes are not tricking me because I can see the belt. Maybe I'm wrong.

4) What the hell is in the second panel on page 3? Tell me, I must criticize it! I can't make sense of most page 1 too. I hardly understand where the comics takes place in (surly not the desert from Rad's comic).

5) There is a loose string in Faw's pants on the last panel of page 2. Is that on purpose? Is that a pencil gone mad?

6) You have really slacked on drawing background (especially on page 2 and 3). More backgroung means more interesting comic and more information on where it takes place.


your comic is k