Wootiness, first chapter. A rather short one at that, but still. Comments?

Thanks for the copies of Surreal Kovu, my how your writing has improved. Although it has made me realise how much I missed Aldan in Apokalypsis.

CHAPTER 1
“…Welh, ah…ah knew isth wash the besht shtime to shtry…”
“…Two ales, dry, no ice…”
It was a night of good occasion – the start of the first celestial’s eve holiday, and around the bar flowed drinks and chatter as the various people toasted their mugs and gave a hearty laugh.
The bartender, wiping down the glass mugs with his white cloth, looked up. “Happy hour boys, ‘th drinks are free.”
“Not thirsty, thanks.” defalcon, having just entered the pub, sat himself down on a stool. Ducky inclined herself to a frosty mug of ale and quietly discussed the night’s events.
“Hm…an ugly little thing, that beast. Looks like a mop crossed with a lawnmower, pretty big too, a good two or three heads above us.”
“Oh? What was that?” Ducky looked up from the foamy beverage the size of a small bathtub and shuffled her feet.
“I said that it was…never mind.” Ducky again buried her face in the mountain of froth, but a loud crash interrupted her. A drunken brawl had broken out on one side of the bar, with a disgruntled customer shattering a bottle over the bartender’s head. A bunch of burley rabbits had begun to swing punches left, right and centre.
“Better leave. Don’t wanna get caught up in that.” Ducky pulled herself up and gulping the last of her drink, pulled defalcon through the door.

“Hm…rather nasty fight,” defalcon looked back at the tavern, where the rowdy shouts and shattering of glass made the golden glow emanating through the door seem somewhat less appealing.
“Yeah. Pity I hadn’t brought my crowd tazer, would’ve been lots of fun.”
“You own a crowd tazer???”
Ducky didn’t reply. Instead she gave a sly grin before, spinning on her heel around the street corner.
WHAM! Right into another rabbit.
“Ouch, that had to hurt.” An amused defalcon watched as Ducky rubbed her forehead. The other rabbit, tall and built like a truck, sprang up onto his feet. “Watch where you’re going.” He growled and took a menacing step forward. Ducky, still clambering out of the gutter, was shoved backwards onto her back by his foot.
“Hey pal, you watch it yourself. Slam my friend again and I’ll deck you so hard you’ll be in intensive care for a year.” defalcon lent Ducky his hand, and the two stared the bruiser of a rabbit down.
“You tiny people are of no concern.” He shoved past them, knocking defalcon aside with his arm.
Ducky glowered at the figure as it disappeared into the fog. “What was that about?”

“Graaawwwlllnnnnnnn,” The beast hissed as he was stubbornly marched into the large underground chamber. The two beasts holding him were nearly twice his size, so he made no attempt to struggle.
“Narlyakishpf, again?” A giant beast sitting upon a throne stared down at the dismal beast shoved before him. “You disobey orders and go above ground? You fool, jeopardising everything for a lark.”
“Fsss masters, I was only above ground for under an hour. If it weren’t for those two ‘hrargrn rabbits, I would’ve been back.”
“What?! You let yourself be spotted?! Did they follow you?!” One of the beasts nearly leapt at Narlyakishpf, eyes blazing red.
“They tried. I dealt with them though, used my screech to lose them.” He puffed his chest out ever so slightly.
“You dealt with them, you say? You’re just lucky your screech was strong enough; you’re only a child, not even an adolescent yet. They could have skinned you alive, the two.”
“I’m easily stronger than most of those hptlash’ fur-brains, why-“
“I don’t care if you’re stronger! Strength is not everything, why I’m betting you used your screech because two rabbits were too much for you.” The eyes of the large beast flared, and he emitted a low growl.
“Well, I…they were…I mean…” Narlyakishpf stammered, looking down at his feet.
“Enough. You are confined to the dungeon for a week. Then see if you’re mature enough to grow up and forget your foolish games.” He settled back into his chair as the guard-beasts dragged the child away.