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Re: Chapter 3: If at first you don't succeed...
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Originally posted by acid
They had been walking a while, when suddenly Jack stopped, and fired. About 20 yards ahead, a smoldering security camera lay on the floor.
“Nice,” said Acid. “With you around, we don’t have to worry about the security cameras!”
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Did I mention "go me"?
Anyway, like I said before, very schwa story. Interesting character development on acid's part, also. (heehee, exploding coffee maker...)
BTW, idea for the name: The Doomsday Device, or Machine, or something. Titles that are really ominous usually denote a good story. I mean, Stephen King and all them horror writers always use ominous titles, don't they? Well, either ominous or straight-to-the-point, like Christine, or something. But "The Bubble" kinda lacks that... whatever it is that... does... stuff... in a title.
BLAAAAAA.
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