I think Dizbob went down the stairs and up/to FS. ;P
Anyway, the 3rd chapter is a bit drawn out. It's got too much conversation and too little actions. Try to concentrate on the things that really matter because readers don't usually want to have a whole chronological list of events. Some things like the fact that Dalspots has left, that Dizbob wanted to introduce her, that 4I Falcon needed to pee aren't important for the 3rd chapter because it's more about Dizbob's acceptance of whatever crazy scheme Fquist has in mind for him.
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