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The Visual Fantasion

Yes, I began a WT story. YaY ^^

Anyway, you may get quite confused if you won't get that I'M A BADGUY! YES! IN MY VERY VERY OWN WT STORY!!1

Ok, enough of (crap?) description. I suck at 'em

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The Visual Fantasion
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Teh prologue

The boy with fresh edition of The Daily Carrot, ran through Turnip Village
on his bike, screaming loudly about the another fall of Devan Shell.
These rabbits, who get the newest TDC, couldn't stop their happiness.
End of the danger! At last!

NOKA, sitting in his chair and reading the somewhat famous information
about Jazz Jackrabbit's victory, thought:
"As always... no credit for us for WHATSOVER. Nothing. Who helped
him to get through Devan's traps? VF! Who destroyed Devan's escape
pod? VF! Who disabled the maintenance warpgate in the fortress?
VF! But obviously, NO CREDIT FOR US. And we STILL have to help
this foo Jackrabbit if we don't want to leave Carrotus. Sounds
like fun."
He looked at the next page, where was interview with Jazz:

-As always, our small team defeated Devan.
-Did you all took a help from someone other?
-If we would NEED help, then he would be still alive.

NOKA couldn't keep the power of his anger. He immediately scratched
TDC to two parts, and threw them to a wall with so high speed, that
both parts of TDC vaporized while meeting wall.

Still, his eyes were glowing red. If one little thing would annoy
him right now, he would lost control over power of his anger.
Last time he did, Holidaius' moon turned into space ashes. This
is why he's different than other members of Visual Fantasers,
anti-terrorist group known more as VF. Being their leader makes the
group a little inconvienient elite.

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Several galaxies to the left, on the super secret secret base of
Devan Shell, was complete pandemonium. Turtles chaoticly running
across countless corridoors screaming something about their end
which is close, pointless alerts set up in labs, escaping lizards,
et cetera. Only one person watched all this mess calmful, without
blinking an eye. He slowly walked to elevator, used the keycard
to access the elite area. There were less turtles, but still, they
all were pointlessly running and screaming. He didn't care.

At last, he walked to a door marked :
Devan's Private Area
Do not enter or be gone.

There weren't any guard, as perhaps they joined the extremely scared crowd.

He just simply kicked the door, and walked inside. From a table
nearby he took few keys, walked to door marked as ARMORY, tried
to open 'em wih keys, and finally succeed.
That room was huge. Numerous missiles, lots of blasters, etc.
But guy was interessed only with the box in the left corner, marked
as TOP SECRET DEVICE. He get his thunderbolt, aimed the box as target,
and shoot. The box crashed, although the huge computer chip which was inside didn't.
There were a instruction of the weird device. Guy took the instruction,
and red it. He grinned at some text there:
"...as I'm sure not even my secret agents would find it. Not even DRG or Cooba,
the best ones."

The reason, why that guy smiled is that as he just made thing that
Devan was sure that it won't happen...

...Cooba, Devan's secret agent, find the most powerful device ever.

To be continued.




BTW, this is pointless claim of 1st page
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May 28, 2004, 01:55 PM
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Hmm. Like to see more.
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May 28, 2004, 06:02 PM
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Tasty.:9 This should be a fun story.
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May 28, 2004, 06:27 PM
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LET'S PLAY BOTH SIDES AGAINST THE MIDDLE.

I mean, NOKA seems to hate Jazz for taking all the credit, Cooba hates Jazz by association with Devin, so... Jazz looks to be in some big trouble. That is what I call playing both sides against the middle.
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Um... slerf.

I really have nothing to say at the moment. Come to think of it, why I'm even posting here is a mystery to me.
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On a better note, that annoying bug with the posting seems to be gone now. GOOD JOB, ADMINS!

EDIT- I STAND CORRECTED.

Strange, the last time I posted it didn't give me that error.
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May 29, 2004, 03:32 AM
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Rspss is wrong.

(token from Every1's characters)
Personality: Vicious. After Devan was lost in space, he thought that he can own his terrorist group, and 'coz the chaos appeared after Devan's accident with rocket, he did that easily. However, Devan was alive and he was surprised when seeing that one of his most loyal and accurative agents traitored him. In fight, Cooba wins and now he has Devan under control. Of course, nobody other from second group (or lower) of initation doesn't knows about it.

SPOILER OMG >OOOOOOOOOO
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Okay, guys, there's eventually feweral fresh stuff for you all!

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Chapter 1 : Connecting some stuff
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-Hey, Niek!
-Yeah, boss?
-Anything right in your sector?
-Like 15 minutes ago.
-OK.

NOKA, with his group, was secretly patrolling the party nearby Castle Earlong. In
case of guarding, nothing could stop him from his job. Not even Jazz's speech, where Jazz mentioned about "the hard work in their three-people group", couldn't do it.

Unknown Rabbit, wandering around, came to Wadledee, foreign investor, who build the funpark nearby Earlong Castle by himself; and started a conversation:

-You know, seeing the size of all this stuff, it's hard to believe that you're
the only one who build them.
-Why?? You think that I couldn't build they all?! I can! If I couldn't, they
won't be here!
-Whatevah. This one rollercoaster looks incredibly leet.
-Agree. - said NOKA, joining the conversation. -But it's rather easy to
have some errors in big things such as this rollercoaster.
-And these two nearby looks kind of bad. - UR replied.
-Yes THEY SUCKS! - said Wadledee. -I KNOW! THEY ARE STUPID COASTERS!
Wen I was making 2nd and 3rd, I getted no inspiration for it! I tried, but it's sucks!

Unknown Rabbit and NOKA glanced at themselves. They probably think about same thing:
If he know that they're bad, so what's the point of building them?

-They can be fun to drive, though. - NOKA said.
-If you say so... - Unknown replied.

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Cooba carefully red the instruction of the device. Then, he decided to go to build it.
"I guess these dumbs won't see that I stole something from private armory of their own boss. Ah, he died with such a wonderful death..."

Cooba get a flashback of Devan's death.

The whole base was shaking like mad, computers were infected by various viruses, and reactor could explode at any moment.
And VF blew up Devan's escape pod.

Devan was running madly for armory. VF get him there, but he set up the bomb, closed
door, and tried to escape with ventilation shaft. Although, Niek, or whatever that
rabbit was named, shot him, and he falled down and broke his leg and gun. Then, VF escaped with same ventilation shaft which Devan was trying to escape with. I teleported out while he didn't see me.

I teleported at satellite nearby. And then, I saw wonderful explosion. The wall of
armory crashed, the computers inside burned, and void outside the station sucked Devan to space...


Cooba sniffed. He decided to go out with the computer chip, but Devan's private
teleporter started to make weird noise. Thus, Cooba flipped back his head and
saw Devan teleporting to base.

- "Ahh, fresh air... oh, agent Cooba, hello. I see that you find thing I thought
you won't find."
- "But.. tt tt tt.. how?!?"
- "Well, I don't need to breath in my dragon form" - Devan grinned.
- "We'll see!" - Cooba screamed. He get his thunderbolt and shot at Devan.
Devan got paralyzed for a while, but when effect weared off, he said:

- "Ah, so! We have a little revolt here, right? After my vanish, you planned to be
leader!"
- "Well, to be honest, I planned it years ago."
- "GAAAAH!" - screamed Devan, getting his gun and shooting at Cooba.
Cooba dodged the energy balls, and ran to armory. He didn't hear to Devan screaming
'NOOO'. Devan followed him, but agent was nowhere the find. Devan ran to end of corridoor, expecting Cooba could hide in bunch of grenades. While searching for
agent in that bunch, somehow the grenades all exploded. Cooba (he shot at grenades) came to see that is Devan alive or not. And then, Devan catched his leg from below and thus, agent falled to floor.

Devan stand up, got his gun, aimed at Cooba, and said:
- "You knew what you were doing... I mean, you were doing..."

CLICK!
ZAP!
BOOM!

Devan's gun exploded, like it always does while it's running out of ammo.

"So, mr. three-fourteen" - said Cooba - "I see that you're very, very sick. I wonder
what your troops would do while they would hear that you're alive but sick and thus, you give full control over 'em to me. Do you wonder it too?"
- "You won't do it!" - said Devan. "You won't destroy Carrottus with my whole group!
That's what I planned from my BIRTH!"
- "Old, poor, outdated Devan Shell. Do you really think I need all those dumb butts
to destroy Carrottus?" - asked Cooba - "I will keep your - excuse me - MY wholesome
army to pwn the universe! Carrotus isn't enough, you know." - he grinned. "I send
a super secret spy to Carrotus. His goal = assassinate everyone."

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"Awsome Carrotusland Rollercoster" - that was the name of the rollercoaster which Wadledee built - was going to be open.

"You're not going to ride, your majesty?" - Coppertop asked Jazz.
"No. We have enough of claiming first ride/visit/frag/whatever. It's getting boring
after you did it in something about plenty of times." - said Jazz.
"Whew. It looks like first ride will be claimed by very random people."
"Unknown Rabbit isn't random rabbit." - Jazz grinned.
"Ahhh... UR." - Coppertop glanced evilly at Unknown speaking with NOKA. She decided to go to them.

"SEVERAL of you two" - Copper looked angrily at UR (he replied with the same glance). "are going to claim the first ride on this track."
"You lost your ticket in your pocket, or something?" - Unknown said, with innaturaly sweet voice.
"No. Jazz just wanted you to ride with other random people." - Copper replied with even more sweeter voice than UR's.
"So, say him that I'm not as mad to ride on this. It would make me vomitting my lungs around."
"Fine then. I'll ride. At least I won't need to smell your purple-tinted fur." - said
Copper, going to the Jazz.

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The first car or whatever rides on rollercoasters (here, shaped like choo-choo train), with Copper and few other rabbits inside, was slowly moving on the track.
NOKA with rest of VF didn't ride because they still had to patrol the party. Niek was looking at the car quite jealously. Meanwhile, Unknown Rabbit was looking at Coppertop,
and he was looking like he would be in an eternal dream. Truly, her wavy black hair and deep green eyes, not to mention the preciousssssss face, were very delightful to look at.

Rollercoaster starts with 100% vertical fall, and then 22 degree slope
going above ground. Then, a corkscrew maneuver, a curve leading right-down, vertical fall, then again slope, but with lower degree. Then, few spirals on it's way, fall, slope, corkscrew, and very very wise thing : slow-down. If it wouldn't be there, whole car would be shot out far, far away. Then, a slope going down, few curves, and the end.

The car was increasing it's speed. Rabbits were making loud noises like "YaaaaaaY!". Wadledee seemed to be truly proud of it...

Car started to incline slightly to the right, while driving like crazy. Rabbits instantly
became scared. Then, it drove to the corkscrew, and to the slow-down. But instead of slowing car down, it didn't anything. Thus, car's speed threw the car itself above whole Castle Earlong, the pond around castle, to the forest behind it, where it exploded.

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Everyone ran to the forest. They didn't noticed anything but few chunks of metal, and rabbits lying on the grass. After a while, the ambulance came. Doctors took everyone who were driving rollercoaster, and drove away.

"Oh, ohh how TERRIBLE!" - Wadledee screamed.
"Indeed terrible, you know. Although, don't you think that it's quite wierd that the coaster didn't work? Last time we checked it, it was fine. But you wanted to "stay ther a moment", for no reason. Can you explain this?" - Unknown Rabbit asked.
"Wh-WHATS?! YOU THINKED THAT I'TS ME WHO DESTROYED THE CAR?! IT WASN'T NOT ME!! NOT! WHY DO YOU THINK I DID IT'S?!"
"To kill him?" - NOKA suggested, pointing at Jazz.
"NO!! THAT'S ISN'T ME! I'M NOT BAD! I'M NOT! NOOOT!"
"Babbling cretin. Take him." - said Lori.
"NO! I DIDN'T MADED A ACIDENT!! I DID NOT INJURIED RABBITS! I CAN'T INJURY RABBITS! I'M RABBIT
TOO! I DID NOT ENJURIED CT!!!" - screamed Wadledee, while guards took him to Castle Earlong.

"Wait.. did he mention about Copper?" - asked Unknown.
"Yes, as she was driving this car too." - replied NOKA.
"Oh my god... NO!" - screamed UR. "It can't be! I'm going to the hospital, right now."
"But.." - NOKA said.

Unknown didn't hear it, though, as he was far away.
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I don't care that is "drove" correct Past Simple of "drive" or not.

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My brain! It combusts with much vigour!
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If I told you, you'd most certainly beat me to death with my own feet.
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Wait, are these rollercoasters? Why is there someone who drives them? Aren't rollercoasters automatic?

Otherwise... fascinating. ANGST! ^.^
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I believe Cooba meant "ride" instead of "drive". But that's just me. And that's also one of the many reasons why, upon the initial readment of this chapter, my brain decided to combust with much vigour.
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Jun 17, 2004, 04:56 AM
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Quote:
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Wait, are these rollercoasters? Why is there someone who drives them? Aren't rollercoasters automatic?
Yes, they are automatic. Me dumb.

Quote:
Originally Posted by Unknown Rabbit
Otherwise... fascinating.
Yay, thanx. I expected somewhat other opinion, though.

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ANGST! ^.^
INDEED! ^.^

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Jun 17, 2004, 12:42 PM
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BTW, from 25th June (or something) chapters will eventually be released in shorter period of time. YaY me.
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YaY you indeed. OMB I'm in it! o_O
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Did you enjoy the cameo? ;)
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The silence says everything. Although I doubt it would be easy to enjoy a cameo in which one is involved in a catastrophic roller-coaster train wreck. I know I wouldn't.

Come to think of it, I don't think I'd be riding a roller coaster in the first place. So hoo-ha.
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JES MIJ IS WRONG I HAV TO RE-WRIITTE I'TS ;(

I see, trying to kill her after few seconds of appearance was bad. Now I have to
make her quickly back to health (and therefore rewrite half of next chapter... gah).
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You could always just not have her on the rollercoaster...
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It's okay, honestly ..
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YaY. You say it right after the whole plot with you being unconscioncus went bye-bye. Such a delight >(
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I expect huge mess in the next chapter. Anyway, as I promised, from today I'll heavily work on it (don't expect one chapter per day, though)

And yes, CT *will* spend few chapters... being inactive. That don't mean she will stay motionless in hospital until the story will end.
 

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