Invasion of the Game Killers

[Love & Thunder]

Deleted out of sheer embarassment. Sorry :P

[KRSplat]

Firstly I disagree, does not suck. And here are tips that could make you feel samely:

These are about formatting.
1, why did you start paragraphs with ----? Ok i see whym because forums don't have tabs working. But anyway
2, between paragraphs it's easiest to read line breaks as replacement for tabs. such as this:

"Blah blah because tabs dont work i started with new line and no tab"

"ya i just did that too and put two line breaks between this and last paragraph"
"sweet now i know common formatting for online storytelling"

"k thx i hope we r right about this!"


You did that sometimes but not all the time, anyyway that is just what i tihing.k.
So about what happens, im confused how these characters met, what allowed them to coexist? Lots of story elements that have yet to align themselves into commonalities of the tale.

[Love & Thunder]

Thanks for the tips, and I have been planning on going back to this story for a while now, but I've had basically no motivation, and not enough free time to write something like this.
But, your post has reminded me of this Story, and now that I have some free time, I am going to start editing it once I've posted this. Thanks for the reminder. And the Motivation.

EDIT: Keep an eye on this post for updates.
EDIT 2: Like I said earlier in this post, I haven't had too much free time to write this story, but I think I should be able to make some progress soon. :)