Renegade

[Violet CLM]

On 5:03pm 9-04-2001, Rumbo Rabbit wrote:



'Wait!' Unknown said.

'No, leave him...' Unknown said, 'he is the first to follow his destiny.'









Why am I nitpicking? Why don't I just leave already? http://jazz2.nagcentral.com/forum/images/smiles/icon_smile.gif Good story. I expect to see at least two more continuations when I get back. http://jazz2.nagcentral.com/forum/images/smiles/icon_razz.gif

[Wazz Wackrabbit]

Hmm... Can't wait more!!

But story is GOOD! Rating: 10/10 points!

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Rumbo



Phew! Luckilly I altered the mistake!

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'With his father dead and his life as confusing as TIME itself, he stood independantly with his blaster and sword by his side. He was going to save the world, no doubt about it...'

[Kaz]

I saw it too, teh gramma polees shall arrist j00!!!

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Rumbo and Talec headed to the warp drive. As they reached it Rumbo began to feel something pure inside him. Defalcon was calling to him, giving him this sensation of....

'Old Carrotus...' Rumbo said, closing his eyes and breathing in deeply, letting it out of his mouth.

'They have found it?' Talec said, continuing to drive toward the warp drive. Once they were close enough they stopped and went off their hovercrafts and walked towards the drive.

'Does it mean that the prophecy is true?' Talec asked Rumbo.'

'Indeed it is...I know how to beat Nebula now...'

'Freeze him inside the TIME stone?'

'Create a world within the TIME stone that only TIME can open. He is on my side I feel him within me...'

'...i shall help thee, rumbo...' TIME spoke to Rumbo, not to Talec. He couldn't hear TIME's voice any longer.

'So we head through the drive and see where it leads...' Talec added.

'Yes...we go now...'



Talec and Rumbo stepped up to the drive and stood watching it, standing side by side. The whirling sound of the warp echoed through their ears and propelled them backwards from the tiny wind coming from it.

'Our destiny awaits...' Talec said

'Carrotus has its destiny beyond this warp.' Rumbo added.

'TIME and space are on our side.'

'But the creator is not.'

'We must go now.'

'Go...we must.'



They walked into the warp drive, unaware of where they would be heading. They found out soon enough.



'Now we must wait...' Defalcon said as he finished sending his feelings through to Rumbo.

'So now what?' Ax Man asked, 'we wait here?'

'There must be something that we can do...' Unknown said.

'Maybe there is...' a voice said to them, somewhat familiar yet rare. The three rabbits slowly turned round and saw noneother then...



'Hell's Angel!' Ax Man said proudly.

'Get your weapons together, boys,' Angel said, holding a very nifty M16, 'we've got a revolution to revolt!'

[Coppertop]

Woot! I'm the first to like it and say so!



Ruxor twice over, Rumbo. Keep it up!

[Wazz Wackrabbit]

Keep workin'!







'Nuf said.

*warps out

[Talec]

YaY ^_^



~Talec "Continue!" LP

[Nightshade]

Wish you were taking joiners. . .

Great story, RuxOr!!!!!123

Continue!

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Rumbo and Talec headed into the warp drive...arriving where the others had travelled towards, Nebula's tower. This was it, the final showdown.

They landed with a thud in the middle of a large living room somewhere half way up the tower. The walls were lined with pictures of Nebula in his different forms, plus his interpretation of the future, one that undoubtedly doesn't exist. There were three leather sofas which neither Rumbo or Talec trusted, and two doors of exit to choose from. They heard shuffling from behind one of the sofas.

'Friend or foe!' Talec shouted out to them.

One of them recognised the voice, 'Talec, is it really you?'

Suddenly from behind the sofa came Splash and Coppertop, who was shaking with nerves and wondering who was there. When they saw who was standing there their eyes instantly lit up. Their hero was still alive.

'Rumbo!' Coppertop shouted

'Yeah man, yeah!' Splash said to him, flying a little with his rocket pack. They ran over to him and shked his hand. Then from the sofa came Nobara, who stood up and looked at them both. She walked over to them and kissed them both on the cheek. Rumbo and Talec blushed badly.

'Ahem,' Talec said, 'we have got a job to do...'

'Talec take them to the top and save the world, would ya?'

'Rumbo?'

'Just do it Talec I have a job to do, one that coincides with what you must do.'

'Rumbo you're not making any sense,' Splash said to him.

'Look just get to the top, ok? You'll meet the past team another third of the way up. Join them and continue upwards. I will meet with you again I promise. Tell Jelze and the others that I am ok.'

'Ok mac,' Coppertop said, 'just do what you've gotta do.'

'I will, Nobara, I will.' And with that Rumbo Renegade Rabbit disappeared into TIME, heading towards another part of the world where he would find only one thing...



The TIME stone.

[Wazz Wackrabbit]

r0x0rz as long you continue!



Can't wait continiuation...

[Kaz]

You really shoudn't self center yourself =P

[Violet CLM]

Would you prefer he wrote himself out of the story?

[Ducky]

Sigh..

Its so beautiful Rumbo.

`Duckay

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Spot the mistake in the last story extract. The first person to spot it and say wins a prize! Can somebody alter it for me pls.



Rumbo

[Kaz]

On 1:56am 9-22-2001, Rumbo Rabbit wrote:

Rumbo and Talec headed into the warp drive...arriving where the others had travelled towards, Nebula's tower. This was it, the final showdown.

They landed with a thud in the middle of a large living room somewhere half way up the tower. The walls were lined with pictures of Nebula in his different forms, plus his interpretation of the future, one that undoubtedly doesn't exist. There were three leather sofas which neither Rumbo or Talec trusted, and two doors of exit to choose from. They heard shuffling from behind one of the sofas.

'Friend or foe!'Should be " instead of ', also, I'm not sure but I believe you're supposed to have the "!" at the end of the entire sentence instead of the phrase. Talec shouted out to them.

One of them recognisedCould be recognized? the voice, 'Talec, is it really you?'

Suddenly from behind the sofa came Splash and Coppertop, who was shaking with nerves and wondering who was there. When they saw who was standing there their eyes instantly lit up. Their hero was still alive.

'Rumbo!' Coppertop shoutedShould there be a period here?

'Yeah man, yeah!' Splash said to him, flying a little with his rocket pack. They ran over to him and shkedIsn't there supposed to be an "a" somewhere in there? his hand. Then from the sofa came Nobara, who stood up and looked at them both. She walked over to them and kissed them both on the cheek. Rumbo and Talec blushed badly.

'Ahem,' Talec said, 'we have got a job to do...'

'Talec take them to the top and save the world, would ya?'Person saying this is undefined

'Rumbo?'

'Just do it Talec I have a job to do, one that coincides with what you must do.'This "." should be a ","

'Rumbo you're not making any sense,' Splash said to him.

'Look just get to the top, ok? You'll meet the past team another third of the way up. Join them and continue upwards. I will meet with you again I promise. Tell Jelze "Jelze" should have a capital Z and the others that I am ok.'

'Ok mac,' Coppertop said, 'just do what you've gotta do.' Shouldn't that be Nobara?

'I will, Nobara Or should this be Coppertop?, I will.' And with that Rumbo Renegade Rabbit disappeared into TIME, heading towards another part of the world where he would find only one thing...



The TIME stone. "The" shouldn't be capitalized or at least if it is then this sentence is a fragment





Heheh, I'm not sure if all those are right though...



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Even randoms have logic in them.

It always seems that everybody that you need to say yes says no, and that you always think of the greatest thing 3 minutes after it's actually needed. Why persist? Becuase, someday you'll get it right.

[Rumbo Rabbit]

No offence but people who critisise my work (that probably spelt wrong) **** me off. If you want perfection go and buy a novel.



Rumbo

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Erm...sorry Kaz I so apologise I forgot about what I had previously written. Besides I only asked for one, which was the last one lol



*blushes*



But in future can people stop telling me what is wrong with my work, for example Unknown (and don't deny it!)



Rumbo

[Kaz]

=\... I just wanted to make sure I got it... do I win =D?

[Coppertop]

I'm back and it's as good as ever!

[DDay]

Cool job. I haven't seen the Jazz community for a long time... heh heh.

[Violet CLM]

We want more. Now.

[Kaz]

:( did I kill it?

[defalcon]

I don't know where RUmbo is. He seems to have disappeared, I've ICQ'd him a dozen times or so.

Rumbo, if you're there, we're waiting for an update!

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Im gonna start writing this soon, again, AND finish it. there isnt far to go on it...

Btw go to... http://communities.msn.com/ExtremeNothingness

and see my story in the writers circle that I am going to write soon...

Hope you like the final conclusion...

Rumbo Rabbit

[DDay]

Yay, thanks for returning! n_n Okay, post da thing! :D

EDIT: Unfortunately, nothing seems to BE in the Writers' Circle... *sigh* too bad.

EDIT AFTER FOLLOWING MESSAGE: Oh, ok. Well, I'm prepared. :)Was this post really five minutes after the previous one? :eek:

[Rumbo Rabbit]

Thats cause its not in yet. Check it soon ill write a little note about it..

Rumbo

[Violet CLM]

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