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Sauronman · Nov 21, 2004, 06:16 PM

Hello, i am chilean and mi english is very bad, 14% english 100%spanish lol... welll, i not have a traductor to spanish to english ehehehe, ok...

well, i created a picture, i do not try to bother to fans of Lori, i only want to show a drawing which I did a long time ago, thanks friends,.bye!!

Odin · Nov 21, 2004, 06:21 PM

What You Say!

Fawriel · Nov 21, 2004, 09:04 PM

Oh please, it's easy to get what he's saying.

And.. nice picture. The facial expression is good.

Violet CLM · Nov 21, 2004, 09:40 PM

Hey, not a bad picture. The shading style seems to be basic gradients, but it works very well, especially on the pants. My main problem is that a few areas should have had a little more work put into them...
Lori's front hair. It looks two dimensional. Actually, the whole top-of-her-head area is really confusing, and I can't figure out what parts are her head, which her hair, and which her ears. My current guess is that one of the ears is really big. I'm not sure. Needs a lot more distinction and 3dism.
Lori's hands. Those do not look like fingers at all. They look like a roundish object with a few black lines drawn on it. Again, too flat.
Lori's right foot (our left) is also confusing. It just seems to cut off at the bottom, instead of being rounded like the other.
Final nitpick are the breasts, which do not suffer from being flat at all. The one on the left (our right) is fine, though it may be a little big for Lori - artist's interperetation, I guess. The other one, unfortunately, looks more like a picture of a fish, painted purple and yellow. It's shaped and sized differently from the round one. I suspect you may have been trying to place emphasis on Lori's more feminine attributes - the butt is a little big, by the way - which may not be the best idea for a rabbit who dresses in exercise gear, jumps around a lot and does karate kicks with great regularity. Would this body be very useful for that?
Anyway, this isn't bad, but there were a few things which jumped out at me. Keep up the good work, and consider submitting it to Lori Central... far too much Lori art is posted here but not submitted.

Odin · Nov 22, 2004, 11:41 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Violet

I suspect you may have been trying to place emphasis on Lori's more feminine attributes

You're turned on. Admit it.

Hazel-rah · Nov 22, 2004, 11:49 AM

lol, nothing wrong with the female body... :P

The only two things I have to say are her legs are huge. Make then skinnier and a little more muscular.
And she appears to only have 2 toes on each foot. Bump it up to three, with the middle toe a little bigger/longer than the other two.

Other than that it is very nice fan art.

Nov 21, 2004, 06:16 PM	#1
Sauronman JCF Member Joined: Nov 2004 Reputation:	Hi!, i am new in this forum Hello, i am chilean and mi english is very bad, 14% english 100%spanish lol... welll, i not have a traductor to spanish to english ehehehe, ok... well, i created a picture, i do not try to bother to fans of Lori, i only want to show a drawing which I did a long time ago, thanks friends,.bye!!

Nov 21, 2004, 09:04 PM	#3
Fawriel JCF Éminence Grise Fawrret! Joined: May 2002 Location: Air guitar on the Himalaya Reputation:	Oh please, it's easy to get what he's saying. And.. nice picture. The facial expression is good. __________________

Nov 21, 2004, 09:40 PM	#4
Violet CLM JCF Éminence Grise JCF Member Joined: Mar 2001 Location: The Intergalactic Repneck Bar	Hey, not a bad picture. The shading style seems to be basic gradients, but it works very well, especially on the pants. My main problem is that a few areas should have had a little more work put into them... Lori's front hair. It looks two dimensional. Actually, the whole top-of-her-head area is really confusing, and I can't figure out what parts are her head, which her hair, and which her ears. My current guess is that one of the ears is really big. I'm not sure. Needs a lot more distinction and 3dism. Lori's hands. Those do not look like fingers at all. They look like a roundish object with a few black lines drawn on it. Again, too flat. Lori's right foot (our left) is also confusing. It just seems to cut off at the bottom, instead of being rounded like the other. Final nitpick are the breasts, which do not suffer from being flat at all. The one on the left (our right) is fine, though it may be a little big for Lori - artist's interperetation, I guess. The other one, unfortunately, looks more like a picture of a fish, painted purple and yellow. It's shaped and sized differently from the round one. I suspect you may have been trying to place emphasis on Lori's more feminine attributes - the butt is a little big, by the way - which may not be the best idea for a rabbit who dresses in exercise gear, jumps around a lot and does karate kicks with great regularity. Would this body be very useful for that? Anyway, this isn't bad, but there were a few things which jumped out at me. Keep up the good work, and consider submitting it to Lori Central... far too much Lori art is posted here but not submitted. __________________ 1

Nov 22, 2004, 11:49 AM	#6
Hazel-rah JCF Member Rebel Rabbit Joined: Sep 2004 Location: Michigan, USA Reputation:	lol, nothing wrong with the female body... :P The only two things I have to say are her legs are huge. Make then skinnier and a little more muscular. And she appears to only have 2 toes on each foot. Bump it up to three, with the middle toe a little bigger/longer than the other two. Other than that it is very nice fan art. __________________ <img align="right" src="http://webpages.charter.net/jazzjackrabbit/sig/El-ahrairah.PNG" height="200"><table bgcolor="navy"><td><font face="Trebuchet MS" size="3" color="blue"><i>"El-ahrairah, your people cannot rule the world, for I will not have it so. All the world will be your enemy, Prince with a Thousand Enemies, and whenever they catch you, they will kill you. But first they must catch you, digger, listener, runner, prince with the swift warning. Be cunning and full of tricks and your people shall never be destroyed."</i> - The Blessing of El-ahrairah, Watership Down </font></table>

Nov 21, 2004, 06:21 PM	#2
Odin Banned My dad's Asian. Joined: Dec 2003 Location: Sub-Basement of Solitude	What You Say!