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On 1:56am 9-22-2001, Rumbo Rabbit wrote:
Rumbo and Talec headed into the warp drive...arriving where the others had travelled towards, Nebula's tower. This was it, the final showdown.
They landed with a thud in the middle of a large living room somewhere half way up the tower. The walls were lined with pictures of Nebula in his different forms, plus his interpretation of the future, one that undoubtedly doesn't exist. There were three leather sofas which neither Rumbo or Talec trusted, and two doors of exit to choose from. They heard shuffling from behind one of the sofas.
'Friend or foe!'Should be " instead of ', also, I'm not sure but I believe you're supposed to have the "!" at the end of the entire sentence instead of the phrase. Talec shouted out to them.
One of them recognisedCould be recognized? the voice, 'Talec, is it really you?'
Suddenly from behind the sofa came Splash and Coppertop, who was shaking with nerves and wondering who was there. When they saw who was standing there their eyes instantly lit up. Their hero was still alive.
'Rumbo!' Coppertop shoutedShould there be a period here?
'Yeah man, yeah!' Splash said to him, flying a little with his rocket pack. They ran over to him and shkedIsn't there supposed to be an "a" somewhere in there? his hand. Then from the sofa came Nobara, who stood up and looked at them both. She walked over to them and kissed them both on the cheek. Rumbo and Talec blushed badly.
'Ahem,' Talec said, 'we have got a job to do...'
'Talec take them to the top and save the world, would ya?'Person saying this is undefined
'Rumbo?'
'Just do it Talec I have a job to do, one that coincides with what you must do.'This "." should be a ","
'Rumbo you're not making any sense,' Splash said to him.
'Look just get to the top, ok? You'll meet the past team another third of the way up. Join them and continue upwards. I will meet with you again I promise. Tell Jelze "Jelze" should have a capital Z and the others that I am ok.'
'Ok mac,' Coppertop said, 'just do what you've gotta do.' Shouldn't that be Nobara?
'I will, Nobara Or should this be Coppertop?, I will.' And with that Rumbo Renegade Rabbit disappeared into TIME, heading towards another part of the world where he would find only one thing...
The TIME stone. "The" shouldn't be capitalized or at least if it is then this sentence is a fragment
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Heheh, I'm not sure if all those are right though...
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