This is a picture I sketched at first, then covered with a roller pen. I colored it on the computer and it looks pretty good. Here it is:

That came out very well. I really like it's cartoony style. Very nice job.

I like it. Only thing is that usually when you're aiming a gun down, you have your arms equal angle to the gun. Otherwise you can't aim.

Also try to keep characters feet level.

But it is pretty cool. Keep going.

I think the handle's way too small.

Hmm... tips...

Add more shading.
I thought Jazz held his gun like a machine gun...
Hide the backpak behind him a lot.
The bottom of the feet should be closer to even unless he's stepping on a rock.


-v-... Other than that the coloring is very good.

Que Passa!!!!

Jazz's face and head look especially good!

Much better than yer previous ones!^.^
Critic:
Proportions!How's he supposed to hold it like that?

It does need a little fixing (the way Jazz is aiming his gun, the handle kind of bent... , the feet are out of place, I wasn't really trying to get shading, but I can always add it, and the backpack probably should be a little more behind him.)

Well, my third version is going to have shading. I corrected the things people said I should fix and here is the fixed picture.

The arms is weird, and the fingers is too small. ;P
And the red from Jazz backpack was supported to go under his arm geez :P

Oops... your right about the straps..... and the fingers are a little small, I think I can fix that.

Here's another picture I just made of Jazz, Spaz, and Lori. I did the same steps as the last picture (sketched it out in pencil, and covered with a black razor point pen, then colored them on the computer- I made a backround after, then pasted their names on.)
I think Jazz looks pretty skinney on that picture, and IMO, I'm not that good at drawing Lori.

Btw: I drew Spaz's feet and ears facing eachother on pupose. Here it is:

If anyone wants me to draw them, I'm not really busy right now, so you can take requests.

Interesting, but that little red "X" doesn't quite look like them. This pic sounds like it could be good, so please try to rewhatever, so it isn't broken.

Hmmm..... sometimes it shows up if you refresh a couple times. Also, you can see it if you click "Reply" and page down to see the picture.

The only thing that I don't like is the way Jazz is holding the gun. It looks a bit unnatural. Otherwise, it's very good.

Beauty

I like the picture(s) but i can only see the first... he aren't good at aiming

Can you draw me? then you would be the first

Have a description of what he/she looks like? Or you could give me a picture to get an idea of what your character looks like. I might want to put in the name, so tell me the name too.


Also, I've got another way you can veiw the pictures: First go to any of the links to see the picture you want to see. ( I'm having a problem with my account on Yahoo. It won't upload some images-like the second version of my Jazz shooting picture. Or it could just be this computer.....)

Go To: http://photos.yahoo.com/bc/jazzjackr...c=ph%26.view=t

to see my first Jazz shooting picture. (this one already shows up on JCF.

Go To: http://photos.yahoo.com/bc/jazzjackr...iew=t&.hires=t

to see my Jazz Group Picture.

I can't see the pictures! *sad* Well, I suppose they are nice pics...