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Jun 12, 2003, 12:11 PM
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Good job, 4I

Yeah, I'm getting better ...
Enjoy.


"Silver Hornet? And Locust? Should I rename the Assassin the Flyswatter" Copper had an odd look on her face, amusement and horror with a bit of apprehension. "Who names their ship Locust?"
"The Kiyrenin, obviously," KRSplat said, recalling what Omega had said about a certain ship named Rain Mantis.
"Hey Copper," Shonar said, "name the Assassin Flyswatter and I'll rename the Lessaria Ant Trap or something like that."
"I've reconsidered. Let's keep it the way it is."
"An excellent idea."
"I know. Isn't it great?"
"I already said that."
"I know, but I like hearing it anyway."
"Too bad. Oh, blast. Those trees just blocked the view."
"Kaz, care to take a flight?"
"No," Kaz said matter-of-factly. "My tail feathers haven't grown back yet." He glanced at Acid, who visibly winced.
"Be that way, then," Copper said. "Even it you are the only flyer we have."
"Excuse me, Copper," N0 said quietly, "but he's not the only flyer."
"What do you mean?"
He grinned. "I fly too."
Copper blinked. "Really?"
"Sure."
"Well, go ahead then."
He nodded. Tiger watched, interested, as N0 spread his wide, black dragon wings against the sapphire Diamondus sky. Within moments of taking off, he was spiralling towards the Silver Hornet and the Locust.
"Clever," was all he said. "I didn't know he had those."
Defalcon blinked and cocked his head. Then he looked over at Copper.
"I'd say that Shinyso's prey is on top of us."
"Really?"
"Yeah."
"How do you know that?"
"I can hear them." He loosened his blades in their sheaths and hefted his blaster rifle thoughtfully.
Before anyone could say anything else, the hunted were upon them. They were a pair of ferrets, both with rust-red fur, a female and a male. She wore armor and bore a large, powerful sword; he had no armor but he had dark claws over his fisted hands. They both wore black jeans.
Copper glanced at her own companions. Tiger and Defalcon both had their blades out, and Defalcon also held one of his rifles; Acid had his rocket launcher aimed casually at the pair; Radium was leaning on his Chaos Lance, ready for action; Crystal was fitting her scope onto her pistol; Claw was tensed, his own claws extended. Copper found her hand on Shale.
The pair stopped dead. The male gestured at them with his claws, his brilliant green eyes feverish.
"Stand aside."
"Why?" Copper asked tersely. The female answered.
"It's better for your health. You know we'll die before we're taken."
Copper laughed. "You think we're Kiyrenin."
"It doesn't matter," she said. "Even if you're not, the ones chasing us are."
"I must concede that point."
N0 dropped silently down behind the pair, a glowing yellow shaft in his gloved hands. The female turned, and backed up a step.
"You see," Copper said, "we're here to retrieve a friend from the Kiyrenin. By force, if we have to. In fact, he's most likely the one chasing you. Tall, black fur, saber?"
The female nodded warily. "That's the one."
"Okay, we're on the right track. That's nice to hear ..."
"You gonna fight?" the maile demanded. "He's got hordes, and they all use magic."
"I can deal with that," Radium said softly from behind Copper. "Most Kiyrenin are ameteurs. Confuse them a bit ..."
"Only if you're sure," Copper replied. Then, to the ferrets, "my name is Coppertop. The one chasing you is Shinyso ... one of my better friends, or he was."
"I'm Shuriken Darkblade," the female said guardedly. "He's Sai."
"Are you going to keep running, or are you going to fight with us against the Kiyrenin?"
"We'll do our bit," Sai said. "No way I'd miss this fight." His eyes flicked over Copper's friends, noting their weapons, resting on Claw for a moment. Surprise was quickly eclipsed by glee. Copper could see what he was thinking.
This is gonna be good.


Added your chars in, 4I
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Jun 12, 2003, 12:45 PM
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whatwhenwhowherehow???

Whaddya mean, 4I falcons new chars? He never said anything! NOBODY EVER TELLS ME THIS STUFF!!! *sob*

Anyways, nice chappie. Something tells me my rocket launcher is going to be either a really big help (BOOOOM) or completely useless. (Against mages? I would think they would be able to block missiles if Radium confused them.)
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Jun 12, 2003, 05:09 PM
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Good stuff!
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Jun 12, 2003, 06:28 PM
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/me is extremely delighted.

Thxes, CT. I owe you one.

/me trundles off to do some more work on his stories...

Oh, and by the way...

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Whaddya mean, 4I falcons new chars? He never said anything! NOBODY EVER TELLS ME THIS STUFF!!! *sob*
...you never asked.
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That was extremely low 4I. *yoink*

mwahaha, I rule over the 12th page again!!
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Jun 13, 2003, 03:02 AM
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You just keep telling yourself that, Kaz...
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--. It's still very low, if this keeps up, CT will be back to 11 pages or worse.

I think I will ^^.
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*gasp* EFIL KAZ!
4I still got it before you cheated.
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Jun 13, 2003, 12:13 PM
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Ah, the wonders of double-posting.

Anyway.
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Jun 13, 2003, 03:18 PM
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*gasp* EFIL KAZ!
4I still got it before you cheated.
--.... ><. CT, I had it first ;p. He was the one who cheated.
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Gasp! Me? Cheating? That's preposterous!
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PH33R the double posting skillz.

I hate these school computers.

And I still have the 12th page.
;p
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Um, that's not cheating... that's... uh... reinforcement! Yeah! That's what that is!

/me smacks Kaz with his Sledgehammer of Discrete Geometry. "Gimme this page. 'Tis mine."
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Jun 17, 2003, 12:32 PM
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Aye.

Shuriken drew her sword. It was quite unique, made of jet and encased in a shell of diamond. Sai's claws were the same, now that she looked closer. Shuri's blue eyes glittered.
"We're with you."
"Good. Try not to kill Shinyso - I want my friend back, not six feet under. Other than that, anything goes."
"Understood."
"Radium, you gonna stay, or get out of the way?"
"Stay, of course. The only place I'd be out of the way would be in the air or up a tree - and I'm actually not that fond of heights." He winced slightly. Copper grinned.
"Okay, if you say so. I'm sure that spear thing is good for something other than a prop."
"Wanna bet?" Electrik said with a sidelong look at Radium. He jumped when the mage poked him in the ribs.
"That's enough out of you," Radium growled. It's kept me alive this long, so I must be doing something right."
"I doubt it," the irrepressible Kaz chortled. "I can't imagine you doing something right."
"Be quiet, you," Radium muttered. "Hmm. If they get close enough I can drop something heavy on them."
"Like Syloph?" Defalcon said. Radium grimaced.
"Now that was a mistake."
"I know," Kaz said smugly. "Like I said -"
"I don't need to hear it again," Radium cut in. "I heard you last time, loud and clear."
"- I can't imagine -"
"Enough, already!"
"- Radium -"
"Kaz -"
"-doing something -"
"Kaz, I'm going to hurt you in a moment ..."
"- right!" he finished triumphantly. Sai brushed his tawny hair out of his eyes.
"I can see this is a friendly place," he observed. Copper shook her head.
"You have no idea."
"I do," Shonar said, "and I still can't understand you. We have maybe five minutes, tops."
"It's enough," Copper said quietly. She began unravelling her braid. "I suggest we keep the shields up on the ships, maybe even getting them out of here. I don't want to chance having a fuel tank hit. Fire would take easily in this forest." She eyed the trees, which resembled tubes of green swiss cheese on sticks. One thing was sure - you could never mistake Diamondan forests.
Shonar nodded. He glanced at Evaluator, who nodded as well and faded away. A moment later the Lessaria rose up and glided away.
Copper began re-braiding her hair so that it wouldn't come out during the fight. Kaz eyed her curiously. She did this before any anticipated fight, but he obviously hadn't seen it before.
"Hey Copper, I been wondering ..."
"What now?"
"Radium and Defalcon both have long hair. How come you're the only one who braids it?"
"Kaz, in case you hadn't noticed, my hair is longer than theirs. Plus, it might have escaped you that I'm a girl."
"That's a stupid reason!"
"Ask a stupid question, get a stupid answer," she said, shrugging.
"It wasn't a stupid question! Was it, Radium?"
"I'm getting sick of hearing my name mentioned ... and yes, it was a stupid question."
"Was not!"
"Well, maybe not for you. But for the rest of us - who are used to thinking - it was stupid."
"Hey ..."
"He knows I insulted him in there but it has yet to register," he noted. About thirty seconds later Kaz glared at him.
"Hey! I do too think!"
"It just hit, huh," Electrik snickered. "Don't worry, Kaz. Someone with as much intelligence as you've got is rare."
"What?"
"I'm not repeating that."
"Good thing, too. He might figure out what you mean, and clobber you."
"Oooh, dangerous ..."
Unnoticed, the Assassin and the Timelost had also vanished. Evaluator reappeared.
"Hey guys, they're almost here."
"Gotcha," N0 said, and took off with great sweeps of his wings. Kaz grinned evilly and climbed a tree. Shuriken found a small cluster of trees close by and prepared to fight, while Sai put his back to a tree. Copper and Claw moved closer together, ready to protect each other's backs; Acid also climbed a tree; Electrik found a convenient stream and began charging up. Defalcon, who still had his weapons out, glanced over at Tiger, who shrugged, pulled off his sniper rifle, and scaled a large tree that was opposite of Crystal's rock, which she was camped out on. KRSplat glanced questioningly at Defalcon, who nodded and handed him a long knife. Blasters were not much good against blades, so Copper tossed him her own long knife she had in her boot. Radium simply shifted his grip on his Chaos Lance and gave Copper a faint grin.
A second later, the Kiyrenin burst out of the trees, silent as death.


Just because Kaz has *almost* every page on here (before you guys wrestled them away from here) a little humor.
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... Kaz's IQ (or Y) = rand()%40+130- ClaimedPages*8
I believe this is the equation CT uses ;p, but humor is good. *stabs Radium* See how funny that is?

Silent as death o.o;;. Death isn't very silent CT ;p
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W00T-ay, another spifflar chapter. Good use of Shuri and Sai. *is impressed and stuff*

*trundles off to go be useless*
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*dances* Haha, good chapter. Kaz is pretty much right here, I believe.
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Quote:
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Silent as death o.o;;. Death isn't very silent CT ;p
Ask a dead person, see what they say.

Great chapter, CT. I have tried to braid my hair before, just not successfully =P.
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/me shudders.
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Don't try it unless you have long hair and a good elastic. A mirror is also reccomended
Well I promised some action scenes, so here you go. A quick one for Radium, one for Defalcon later

Shinyso froze, shock running through his lean frame like a chill. The marks had friends, lots of them, and all well armed. His dual shiploads of Kiyrenin easily outnumbered them, but the marks on their own were deadly. How much more so with over nine companions? And he was pretty sure he didn't see them all.
And now, to make matters worse, he recognized them. The dark haired female, Coppertop; her brown-furred companion, Claw; the young warrio with sky-blue fur and the blades Nightwind and Nightfire, Defalcon. Kaz, the bird up the tree. Acid, also perched on a branch, sighted on them with his rocket launcher. Electrik stood knee-deep in water, his normally serious face lit up with a grin. Shonar paced behind KRSplat, his grey eyes grim. Crystal knelt on a large rock, tensed and ready. Radium leaned on his spear, an insolent grin on his face.
Shinyso drew his saber, eyes on Radium. The Chaos Mage stood immobile, inviting attack, but Shinyso wasn't that stupid. He hadn't lived this long without developing a sense of caution.
Radium straightened, still wearing a grin. Shinyso sidestepped warily, and attacked.
Radium blocked, ignoring the feints, and ducked under the next cut. He slashed up with the business end of the spear, making Shinyso leap back. The telepath brought his saber around in a cut that, had it connected, would have laid Radium open from shoulder to the opposite hip. Radium blocked again, and Shinyso felt a poke at his mind.
Remembering Corbha's report of mind control, he backed off and concentrated on blocking Radium's mind probe, which vanished as suddenly as it had come.
Shinyso shook his head and looked up to see Radium advancing, spear levelled. He ducked and rolled away when Radium reversed his grip and jabbed with the butt of the spear, but it still caught him on the shoulder, knocking him off balance. He came to his feet, ducking under the Lance again, and Radium planted a boot in his chest, knocking him away.
No longer smiling, the mage followed up with with a flurry of movement, driving Shinyso back with a rapid combination of feints, blocks and attacks. Shinyso fell back, frantically defending himself.
A laser lanced by, missing him by a hair. He ducked and looked up to see Tiger, crouched on a branch, laser rifle sighted on him. He threw himself to the side, and found Radium blocking his retreat. Cursing, he sent out a telepathic summons for help.
Radium laughed and the air shimmered. Shinyso had no idea what had happened until he tried again, and found he couldn't concentrate. Radium had set a confusion spell on them, effectively countering their magic.
Shinsy backed away, cursing himself for starting this fight. One of the other Kiyrenin came to his rescue, taking over the fight. Shinyso gratefully retreated. He turned, and found himself facing his original target.
Sai saluted him, green eyes burning. Shinyso could handle this; he wasn't tiring yet, and Sai was scarcely the caliber that Claw was.
A second later he revised that opinion.

Next one's Defalcon's.
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You WOULD say that. You're in it. Did you even READ it?

You posted fast though, so here ...

Defalcon eyed the rabbit who faced him. She was dark purple, with short white hair and cold hazel eyes. She wore a curved sword and a long blade that was just shy of qualifying as a rapier. Defalcon grinned when the air shimmered - whatever powers she had were useless.
She saluted him with her sword. He nodded and drew Nightfire, sensing that this was going to be too close for laserfire. Still, he kept the rifles close to hand.
She drew her knife as well, a condenscending look in her eyes. He grinned again and activated his swords, sheathing them in blue flame and noting that she seemed suddenly alarmed.
I wonder why.
He ducked, his unusually quick reflexes coming into play as she tried a cut at his head. This wasn't going to be fancy swordplay. He swayed to the side as her longer blade flicked by, then attacked with a low horizontal slash intended to make her jump, and a higher vertical one to catch her if she moved forward.
She leapt back and fended off Nightfire with her shorter blade, tangling Nightwind with the curved sword. He lashed out with a foot, catching her knee and making her stumble. Unfortunately her sword had knocked Nightwind wide, so she didn't fall onto his blade, but rather onto him.
Defalcon knocked her sword out of line and twisted away from the knife, his shoulder conveniently shoving her away.
He spun and brought Nightwind up in a move that would have laid her face open if she hadn't dodged. She retaliated immediately with a crosscut that knocked Nightfire away and came dangerously close to disemboweling him. However, since he didn't really feel like losing his insides, he sidestepped and leapt clear over her head.
He landed and spun, launching another rapid-fire attack as she twisted to meet it. His blades flickered in once, twice, Nightfire tangled with her dagger, and the long knife went spinning away to lie glittering in the Diamondan grass, leaving her with just her sword.
Surprise at her unexpected disarming left her momentarily frozen. To her credit she recovered quickly, and skipped back away from Defalcon's blades. She was still too close to use his blasters though, and he moved forward, circling to the side a bit.
She feinted and started a high attack, forcing him to throw Nightwind up to protect the integrity of his skull. She swept her blade down, encouraging him to bring Nightfire up as well, and then she ducked and lunged, her shoulder driving into his stomach.
Gasping, he doubled over, backing away as he tried to regain his breath. She followed, her blade flicking in, testing his already strained defenses.
Abruptly he felt the rough, solid surface of a Diamondan tree bhind him, checking his retreat. He was already tiring quickly, and he was still winded from her last, unexpected move. He realized that he needed to finish her off quickly, or he would become too exhausted.
He shook off the ache that had developed in his stomach where her shoulder had impacted. He would have a nice, colorful bruise later, if he survived that long. Diving forward, he forced her to backpedal a few steps. She recovered and came forward, sword in guard position.
He drew her blade out, and kicked her in the side when she came too close. She recoiled and he locked blades with her, straining to overpower her. Abruptly he threw her back, knocking her off balance. She rolled to her feet as he sheathed Nightfire in a rapid, smooth movement, and lowered Nightwind. She obviously expected a surrender, as she backed off.
He brought his hand up, wishing he dared sheathe Nightwind. Two hands were better for this one. He concentrated briefly.
Better make it quick.
A blast of energy shot from his hand, slow by his standards but quick enough. It spun towards his opponent, striking her chest and throwing her back violently. She staggered to her feet.
She's gonna be sore tomorrow ...
He drew Nightfire again. She came forward, blade leading, but she was dazed and off-balance. He locked blades with her again, and just as she began to back off he swept her sword down and out with his own, bringing Nightwind in fast, too fast for her to twist away. He buried his blade to the hilt in her stomach. She was dead before she hit the ground.
Defalcon swayed and caught himself on the tree that could have killed him. He shook his head to clear his vision and looked up to see Copper and a Kiyrenin tangling blades. She slammed her hilt against her opponent's and kneed him in the stomach before clobbering him over the head with the pommel of her sword. The Kiyrenin collapsed. She turned and faced Defalcon.
"You fight dirty," he noted. She grinned.
"This isn't ballet," she pointed out. "I fight to win. Hey, your own fight was pretty spectacular."
"I try. She wore me out. I'm not good for anything now."
"Looks like you got the better end of it."
"I think I did." He winced, watching Claw brain someone, spin, and slash another one open. "That's gotta hurt."
"I wouldn't know. I've never experienced it."
"Thank your lucky stars for that," Claw said, loping over. "There's only a few left."
"Shinyso?"
"Tangled with Sai. Now there's someone who can use his claws." His tone was appreciative.
"Is Shinyso dead?"
"Not even out of action. He's still going strong. Take a bulldozer to knock him out."
"We knew that."
"Yeah, but does Sai?"
"Good point. How's Shuriken?"
"Bouncing off trees. She's pretty agile, you know."
"So I gathered. Where's Sai and Shinyso?"
"That way."
"Come on."
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Yes, I did read it ¬_¬.

Great 2nd chapter (see? I still like it if I'm not in it). I think I've heard that "Thank your lucky stars for that," line in a book before, I forget what though.
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Well as you've written Radium as all-powerful, he has nothing to complain about ;p.

One excellent way to grasp a character though is to talk to them for more than a few brief lines.

<.brag>I can't be that stupid --. I scored a 1030 (610 math, 430 verbal) on the SATs in 7th grade ;-;... and I'm getting into pre-cal as a sophmore x.x.<./brag>

Come to #jj2 CT ;p
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I'm going to praise both chapters in one almighty blow here.

An excellent battle in the first chapter, although a tad short. Not too short, but just a few lines short. Anyway, Radium's more skilled with a lance than I had previously believed; I originally thought lances were cumbersome weapons. Meh.

The second fight was also not bad. Swordplay is good, on all accounts. I have to reiterate that you put a lot of detail into battles, because it's obviously true. Anyway, I can't wait to see more battles like these.

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Sorry ah haven't replied in a while. w00tness.

I like your description of Diamondus trees... "tubes of green swiss cheese on sticks"

Cool battles so far, but
1. WHEN ARE ELECTRIK AND ASHID GONNA FIGHT?!?
2. Are you going to keep doing this form of 1 person/1 enemy, or will you do some battles with people teaming up? (on both sides)
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mmm. Lances are just staves with a sharp handy edge. Yeah CT, a lot of detail, hard to picture in the head sort of. Use 1337 stick figures.
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Well as you've written Radium as all-powerful, he has nothing to complain about ;p.
Pish, remove the all-powerful magic and I'll cream him

Very nice chapters. The second one was much better, of course.
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You'll notice Radium didn't use any magic in his fight except the confusion spell. So nya
Acid:
1) soon.
2) no. There's one fight I can predict will be one-on-one. The rest is teamwork.
I only did the last battle thing because I promised Defalcon an action scene for his B-day. Though I think it was pretty good

Shinyso backed away slowly, circling, gasping for breath. He hadn't realized that Sai was a berserker, but it made sense. He was untouchable. Every time the telepath was going to score a hit, he found his saber caught by those claws. It was a good thing he was agile. He was constantly moving, avoiding Sai's claws.
He dodged, rolled, came to his feet, already twisting away from the next cut. His reactions bordered on precognition, thanks to his ability. He didn't need to concentrate, just leave his mind open and catch any stray thoughts. It wasn't - quite - cheating.
As it was, Sai hadn't touched him yet. They stayed out of each other's range, circled, feinted a lot. Shinyso avoided closing with Sai - those claws would be murder in close quarters.
He stepped in, engaged briefly, and pulled back. Abruptly he felt another presence, but before he could react pain exploded in the back of his skull and his side. He collapsed bonelessly, without a sound.

"Well," Copper said, having arrived just as Shinyso went down, "that was quick. Who got him?"
"I claim that distinction," KRSplat said, dropping from a tree branch. He held a hefty length of wood that almost qualified as a plank.
"Nailed him with that?"
"Yeah. He wasn't expecting it."
"Well, you're not the only one," Sai said, flexing his hands. He extracted his claws from where he had left them - in Shinyso's side.
Defalcon nodded. "Now I'll bet that hurt."
"I'm sure it did. The point is, we've got him. Now where is Radium?"
"Right here," he said. He limped slightly as he came over.
"What happened to you?"
"That guy had a hard head," he said vaguely. He knelt beside the unconscious telepath. "Good job, guys. I can take it from here. Don't wait for me. I'll find you on Searac."
"Searac? How do you know?" Copper asked, startled.
"It's all in here," he said. "Get a move on, or you'll miss them."
"Right. KRSplat, can I have my knife back?"
"What? Oh, sure." He tossed the blades to their respective owners. "Thanks."
"You're welcome," Defalcon and Copper said in unison. KRSplat grinned.
"So I guess we go to Searac."
"Yeah," Shonar said. "But ... I can't go. I guess you're almost there in discovering this Kiyrenin leader, and my work has been piling up ... "
"I understand," Copper said. "You've done far more than your share. You didn't have to hang around. You have my thanks."
"Aah, it was fun," Shonar said breezily. "I mean, if I hadn't stuck around, I wouldn't have clobbered that Kiyrenin, or almost collided with the Conquistar, or met our ex-Kiyrenin friend over there." He gestured towards Tiger, who was checking the fallen for survivors. Copper noted that many bore laser burns.
"Well, take Eval with you. I'm pretty sure we won't need him anymore."
"Will you guys get going?" Radium said irritably. "You'll miss them otherwise."
Copper nodded. "Right, we heard you. Are you guys ready?"
"Any time."

Woo hoo, it's off to Searac!
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Yay, off to Searac... that's a good thing, right? Great chapter.
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Quite possibly CT, but keep in mind that "Seal-All" from Chrono-Cross was the toughest spell to use ;p.

I see something almost unexpected? I don't know yet, predictable or just not taking that chance CT? Not sure what to expect, take that as a compliment ^^.
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W00T-ay.
I second that.
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Rad: Maybe. We're almost done the story tho.
Kaz: What ...?

The Assassin and the Timelost burst into realspace, black and mirror-silver hulls glowing in the starlight. Searac turned before them, turquoise and blue-green, her pair of moons whitely illuminated. The archipelago(sp?) of islands that wound their way across Searac's surface were a handful of green and amber jewels, strewn across the sapphire depths of the ocean world. These islands were connected by miles of slender, delicate bridges, gracefully spanning the waters.
"Looks wet," Acid noted.
"It is," Copper said. "Radium was right after all. There's the Conquistar."
"You're not going to attack it."
"If I did my gunner would go on permanent strike. We'd be obliterated, my friend. I'm not going to attack it."
"Well that's a relief," he said. "I thought you were going to do something crazy. Now what?"
"We land."
"Down there?"
"Yeah. The Seara designed floating platforms for landing ... it's rather nice, all told."
"Okay," he said dubiously. "I'll take your word for it."
"You won't have to. You're coming too."
"I - what?"
"You're coming too."
"Can't I stay here?"
"No."
"Why not?"
"Because if you try I'll kick you off my ship and leave you here."
"But - "
"Permanently."
"Oh."
"Yes."
He shut up.

Okay, it's short. So sue me.
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Short, but sweet. Left me chuckling for a while.
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Good stufff.
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Thanx.

They landed on a platform, which was basically a metal grid with tubes along the perimeter, filled with a helium mixture. It looked flimsy, but was strong enough to hold two ships and about twelve people and still float.
Copper didn't bother extending the ramp. Dropping down from the airlock with a metallic clang, she strode over to where Tiger was getting out of the Timelost. The salt water lapped at her boots and the laminated steel grate quietly, the platform bobbing and creaking softly. The sound of the wind playing in the sensor arrays around the platform mingled with the hiss of the water. Searac, she noted, was a quiet world, but never without sound.
"Tiger, N0," she said, "I want you to stay here. The Kiyrenin may yet try to sabatoge our ships."
Tiger grinned. "I understand more than you think, Copper."
"Good," was all she said, and turned to look at her companions. Sai and Shuriken had decided to come along, and were looking distastefully at the water. Copper really didn't care.
"Where are we headed?" Electrik asked.
"My sensors said the Kiyrenin landed about ten minutes that way," she said.
"We're headed about ten minutes that way," Acid told Electrik. His brother punched him on the arm. Acid shut up.
"We're headed for Skybattle," Copper said simply. The brothers glanced at each other. Electrik shook his head.
"I'm not even going to ask."
"Good. Even if you did, I don't have any answers," Acid replied, earning himself another punch. Electrik rolled his eyes.
"The winds are good here," N0 commented. He stretched his wings hopefully, but then folded them. They couldn't risk being seen by the Kiyrenin. This time they had no Radium or confusion spell if they were noticed.
"Off to Skybattle, then," Claw said. "After that, I assume it's either Windchime or Battletwist."
"Windchime," Copper confirmed. "Our ultimate destination is Stormstinger."
"Will someone please tell me what the blazes Skybattle and Stormstinger are?" Shuriken said calmly.
"They're bridges," Tiger said briefly. "The Seara name all their bridges, and their platforms. The one we're on is the Starslayer Platform."
"Oh."
"We need to pass the Skybattle, Windchime, Bloodreaper, Wave-eater and Stormstinger bridges," Copper said. "In that order."
"Then let's get a move on," Claw said irritably. "Standing around here all day won't get anything done."
"You have a point."
"We're not sure what it is, but you have a point," Kaz agreed. Claw gave him a dirty look. Kaz shut up.
"Walk, don't talk," he said. KRSplat snickered. Kaz glowered at him.
"He has a point."

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Yay! More!
Yeah the new layout takes getting used to.

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