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Sep 14, 2002, 04:45 PM
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I know, I still haven't completed the Graveyard, but...
... I thought I'd post this one anyway. I just finished it, so there's probably a lot wrong with it.

http://nemesis.rtts.com.au/twoblade.jpg

Comments and Criticism welcome.
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Sep 14, 2002, 08:34 PM
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Great design... though there's something that bothers me 'bout the chestplate and her legs.


I can't seem to point it out though.
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Aye, I'm not really pleased with the armour. It seems too heavy... I might re-draw it and change her outfit completely, but before now I've had no bad comments on the armour (or the sword, even).
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Sep 14, 2002, 10:43 PM
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It rests too high on her chest and has an unnatural shape.
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Tips to fix it would help.
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I'm no artist but I think it's a great drawing. Is the sword supposed to be transparent like that, though?
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It's not supposed to look transparent, but it does. Her hair is supposed to be flowing over the sword...
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Sep 16, 2002, 08:48 AM
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So, give her a transparent steel sword. Make it magical, or maybe futuristic. :-)

Personally, I can't find too much fault in it. I suppose I'm more used to finding errors in cartoony, exaggerated drawings where it's easier to see what's wrong. Ah, well. It looks great to me, but ask everyone else, they seem to know realistic drawings better...
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Woah! I personally think it's really good Good shading
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