Que Passa!!!!

Hewwo, again.
Actually this time I REALLY need some artistic suggestions, imput, and ideas. I desided to do a 4-page comic book that's kind of a "Music video" to the song "William Shakespeare's In My Cat" by the Arrogent Worms(They're some Canadian band I found out about from www.mp3.com they do a lot of really funny/wierd songs with names such as "Good lord, I'm Santa Clause" and "Johnny came home headless".) As you can see from these links: I haven't inked, colored, or added background to them. In fact, all four pages took under 2 hours to draw(Including ideas for what TO draw.).
(Note Read these in order. VERY IMPORTANT!)

http://www.side7.com/cgi-bin/S7SDB/D....pl?INO=251695
http://www.side7.com/cgi-bin/S7SDB/D....pl?INO=251697
http://www.side7.com/cgi-bin/S7SDB/D....pl?INO=251699
http://www.side7.com/cgi-bin/S7SDB/D....pl?INO=251700

Anyway, the reason I submitted these before going over them in detail is: I'm not to sure about what would make it better(Other then color, darker lines, and maybe a touch of shading, of course.)
Thats where you come in. Please give me some suggestions on what to do. Anything helps. /\/\

Now I'm tired Must sleep now, improve comics later...Zzzzzz...

well, it's pretty good, except I think you should make the writing clearer rather than putting a copy inside parentheses.