Here it is.

In this thread, I will present the ten main characters of the story I have been working on for over one and a half years now, counting...

Fabella Vita, the story of life.

The characters will be presented in antichronological order, and after every character description, a reference picture of their Soul Ego will follow.

It starts with...

Yumaldeus Moragape, he incarnation of evil.
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Biography:
Born as the child of a noble couple who owned vast lands near So'elesz City, with brown fur and white hair. He was extremely gifted mentally just as physically.
He was heavily spoilt as a child by his parents. His education lead to him thinking in very black and white ways: The most powerful ones survive, the weak die.
He started research on plastic surgery and DNA study at the age of 15.
The young Yumaldeus was not satisfied with his appearance and planned to change it himself.
At the age of 19, he discovered scrolls and books about history before the year 0.
Learning that the "devil from heaven" Devin, who has, almost 2000 years ago, killed all evil men on the planet, appeared in the country he lived in, he became sure, that his people was chosen to reign over the planet.
At the age of 20, his fur has turned white, his skin was genetically mixed with that of a Techin (a mysterious magical animal ), his hair has been replace by the golden fur of the legendary Golden Wuschel, and so did the rest of his body change.
At the age of 24, he has already built an industrial empire, manufacturing implants (such as the Vileq device ) and other machines, and beside that, was very active in the field of genetic manipulation.
A special unit of scientists working for Mr. Moragape secretly produced weapons, and manipulated the DNA of all kinds of creatures, even humans.
At that point, Yumaldeus Moragape, in his ill mind, had already created a horrible plan: to become the leader of his country, then conquer the rest of the world in a giant war.
That he wanted to achieve with the help of his financial secretary, Mr. Ammon, who was to blackmail and manipulate the people in charge of other countries into betraying each other, and the chief Scientist, Mr. Nimmermehr, who created biological weapons and genetically perfectionated soldiers to secretly sell to the allied countries.
A short time later, at the age of 25, a special event took place in his life.
The headquarters of his firm were invaded by a lizard-woman called Typhona, who was, just as Devin long ago, created by the Magical Spirits who dwell inside earth, the Sirray, to kill Yumaldeus.
After a long and horrible battle, she was miserably defeated. But, before Mr. Moragape could finally kill her, she told him about her origin... and yet another diabolic plan was made in his brain...
He locked her up in his basement, wher he raped her until she gave birth to a baby...
It was a green weasel, which was called " Fawriel".
Afterwards, she was killed, her DNA forged with that of Yumaldeus.
Planning to recrute his son to a powerful soldier, or to absorb his magical powers inherited by his mother himself, he built a mining town to a personal prison for Fawriel, where he was constantly being observed, never allowed to leave.

The story begins 14 years later. Yumaldeus has already, at the age of 41, taken control of his country as well as others.
His plan is about to succeed.

It might just be the style, but he looks like his mouth is on his right cheek.

Originally Posted by RSPSS FR

It might just be the style, but he looks like his mouth is on his right cheek.

Every evil person needs a mutation.

Let me guess. About 0.0% of you read the description, which this is mostly about, right? >_>

FAW wanted this in the war tavern, so OFF TO THE WAR TAVERN IT GOES!

The thread is about the character descriptions, so uhhhhh...character description like conversation? It's the least to ask for

Fishy, Fishy, he's our miss, if his butt isn't special, nobody's is!

FAWriel! *hugs*
Pretty well developed character ... people tend to avoid making really good bad guys, but you've done an excellent job. Though the father-son thing tends to be a bit over-used ... "Faw, I am your father!"
Good job, overall.

Thanks.

Well, yeah, it occured to me that it sounds like the Star Wars thing. XP
But it has symbolic meaning, too.
Typhona = nature
Yumaldeus = man
Man rapes nature.

And the dreamer Faw is a mixture of them both.

I see. I take it Fawriel knows that Yumaldeus is his dad.

Nope, he won't even know that guy existed until the end of the First Act.
Bea and Didi take care of him in that prison city, acting as his parents.

Okay, that IS like SW.

Awwwwwwwww... it's a COINCIDENCE! ;_;
That's like saying "Oy, that story features a female fighter, yo copied from Xena!". *pouts*

Originally Posted by Piccolo

that story features a female fighter

The story has a female fighter? You copied Xena!!

I like to think up entirely original ideas. ATWFF would've been so original if I had finished it.

You CANNOT possibly think up something totally original. Everything has been done before!
Except if you want the hero to be a pudding who has to save the royal lawnmower from the almost-evil packrat-Clearasile pads.

You just gave yourself the starting to an entirely original story!

Fawriel,

First of all, YOUR STORY IS FLIPPING US OFF.

Second, you will NEVER be a Jesus Jumper.

*cough* okay, let's get down to crits'.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

Born as the child of a noble couple who owned vast lands near So'elesz City, with brown fur and white hair. He was extremely gifted mentally just as physically.

Generally people are described by more than their hair color.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

He was heavily spoilt as a child by his parents. His education lead to him thinking in very black and white ways: The most powerful ones survive, the weak die.
He started research on plastic surgery and DNA study at the age of 15.

He's a Radium rip-off.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

The young Yumaldeus was not satisfied with his appearance and planned to change it himself.
At the age of 19, he discovered scrolls and books about history before the year 0.
Learning that the "devil from heaven" Devin, who has, almost 2000 years ago, killed all evil men on the planet, appeared in the country he lived in, he became sure, that his people was chosen to reign over the planet.

Not sure how this fits into anything else you say.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

At the age of 20, his fur has turned white, his skin was genetically mixed with that of a Techin (a mysterious magical animal ), his hair has been replace by the golden fur of the legendary Golden Wuschel, and so did the rest of his body change.
At the age of 24, he has already built an industrial empire, manufacturing implants (such as the Vileq device ) and other machines, and beside that, was very active in the field of genetic manipulation.

His previous color scheme was better. Downgraded D=.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

A special unit of scientists working for Mr. Moragape secretly produced weapons, and manipulated the DNA of all kinds of creatures, even humans.
At that point, Yumaldeus Moragape, in his ill mind, had already created a horrible plan: to become the leader of his country, then conquer the rest of the world in a giant war.
That he wanted to achieve with the help of his financial secretary, Mr. Ammon, who was to blackmail and manipulate the people in charge of other countries into betraying each other, and the chief Scientist, Mr. Nimmermehr, who created biological weapons and genetically perfectionated soldiers to secretly sell to the allied countries.

Ooooh, he's good. *takes notes*

Originally Posted by Piccolo

A short time later, at the age of 25, a special event took place in his life.
The headquarters of his firm were invaded by a lizard-woman called Typhona, who was, just as Devin long ago, created by the Magical Spirits who dwell inside earth, the Sirray, to kill Yumaldeus.

Assassinations are such a special event. "Important" may work better here.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

After a long and horrible battle, she was miserably defeated. But, before Mr. Moragape could finally kill her, she told him about her origin... and yet another diabolic plan was made in his brain...

Why do people ALWAYS tell their life story to the badguy before they die?

Originally Posted by Piccolo

he raped her until she gave birth to a baby...

It would make so much more sense if he only raped her until she was pregnant.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

It was a green weasel, which was called " Fawriel".

I take it this makes him "lukewarm blooded".

Originally Posted by Piccolo

Afterwards, she was killed, her DNA forged with that of Yumaldeus.
Planning to recrute his son to a powerful soldier, or to absorb his magical powers inherited by his mother himself, he built a mining town to a personal prison for Fawriel, where he was constantly being observed, never allowed to leave.

And then the evil witch sent the princess to the attic...

Originally Posted by Piccolo

The story begins 14 years later. Yumaldeus has already, at the age of 41, taken control of his country as well as others.
His plan is about to succeed.

... together, the battle and pregnancy lasted two years?

I don't know whether to hate you or to laugh at you.

I was looking forward to your halfhearted excuses, actually.

I don't have to give excuses. What you're saying is simple bullcrap. Criticising my story is not an option, Rad. =P

I'd at least want to know why she was pregnant for two years.

Apparently because of a grammatical error on my side.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

Apparently because of a grammatical error on my side.

Mathematical, actually. Now explain the warm/cold blooded thing.

Mathematical then. Sounds more alike me anyways.
And there is no problem about the blood. Since all anthros are human, and thus their anatomy and other things are mostly the same.

Lizardpeople are warm blooded? So they're kind of like bald green kangaroos, right?

Hahaharoflololol omg rad u r so funny ;--))))))))))))))

If you got any SERIOUS questions, I'll be glad to prove you that this here story lacks NOTHING, not even logic.

All the questions were serious. First of all, how do a reptile and mammal reproduce, and second, why was she pregnant for two years?

First was answered, second was answered. Will you be quiet now? Please?

Originally Posted by Piccolo

Will you be quiet now? Please?

If you don't want criticism, don't make anything. No matter what you create, you'll get criticism. Not everyone in this world is a hug-happy deviantzombie, and the MINUTE you release something to the real public, you will be hit with so much hard criticism you'll break down to tears. Most people'd break down to tears, you'd probably kill yourself.
Don't think of criticism as a series of insults, think of it as a "proofread". Do you think famous authors write a book, send it in, and make millions? No! If you've ever seen a proofread book, you'll wonder how the editor could afford that much ink. Does the author say "screw you" and release the book anyway? No! They cut, copy, and paste until the book is the epitome of perfection! I've seen novels get turned into children's books during the editing process, so don't expect it to EVER be easy. But the authors know that they either listen to the editor's criticism, or hear the same thing from thousands of angry readers. There's a VERY large line between completed and completed right. Cruel criticism WON'T go away. Kind criticism is always incomplete criticism.
It's a cruel world. Learn how to twist it around your finger, or get twisted.

I won't even read that. My mood is too good.
Don't think I'm a stupid little child that thinks he's a little Superman who does something and it's perfect at once.
It's not my fault you're too blind to see that.
I can very well see what is wrong with the things I do myself, thankyouverymuch.
And no one will care that a lizard and a weasel can't mate in real life, since this is FANTASY, and ALSO, THEY. ARE. HUMAN!. CREATURES! AND THUS HAVE THE FRIKKIN SAME ANATOMY AS WELL AS ORGANS AND ALL THAT! D'OH!
If you'd just once believe me that my "hlaf-hearted excuses" are actually true...

Originally Posted by Piccolo

I won't even read that. My mood is too good.

I'll post it again, only in bold this time.
If you don't want criticism, don't make anything. No matter what you create, you'll get criticism. Not everyone in this world is a hug-happy deviantzombie, and the MINUTE you release something to the real public, you will be hit with so much hard criticism you'll break down to tears. Most people'd break down to tears, you'd probably kill yourself.
Don't think of criticism as a series of insults, think of it as a "proofread". Do you think famous authors write a book, send it in, and make millions? No! If you've ever seen a proofread book, you'll wonder how the editor could afford that much ink. Does the author say "screw you" and release the book anyway? No! They cut, copy, and paste until the book is the epitome of perfection! I've seen novels get turned into children's books during the editing process, so don't expect it to EVER be easy. But the authors know that they either listen to the editor's criticism, or hear the same thing from thousands of angry readers. There's a VERY large line between completed and completed right. Cruel criticism WON'T go away. Kind criticism is always incomplete criticism.
It's a cruel world. Learn how to twist it around your finger, or get twisted.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

Don't think I'm a stupid little child that thinks he's a little Superman who does something and it's perfect at once. It's not my fault you're too blind to see that.

If you were perfect, I wouldn't criticize you. And blind? I may not be able to see, but you're seeing things that aren't there.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

I can very well see what is wrong with the things I do myself, thankyouverymuch.

EVERYBODY thinks this at first. Eventually you'll have to face the cold hard truth that you can't validly criticize yourself.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

And no one will care that a lizard and a weasel can't mate in real life, since this is FANTASY, and ALSO, THEY. ARE. HUMAN!. CREATURES! AND THUS HAVE THE FRIKKIN SAME ANATOMY AS WELL AS ORGANS AND ALL THAT! D'OH!

That's why I was asking what made her a "lizard" if she's not a reptile.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

If you'd just once believe me that my "hlaf-hearted excuses" are actually true...

...then I wouldn't be a very good critic, would I?

Not the best sort of argument to read when I'm about to kill someone already...

Rather interesting of a read.

Radium should consider doing professional editing/proofreading. He could help change the very destiny of the world. And I'm not even being sarcastic. ;-P


~morganeverett

Originally Posted by Agent Megumi

Radium should consider doing professional editing/proofreading. He could help change the very destiny of the world.

Or weapons testing; that's always fun.

Wait, weapons testing as a target or as a user?

Originally Posted by Radium

Or weapons testing; that's always fun.

Exactly. Do weapons testing, too. If you ever need funding, I can rob the nearby bank for you.


~morganeverett

And I still didn't read it. Fun.

If you're such a great critic, why don't you..


..criticise CT? Yeah, she's got to imperfect, too. Tell HER what's wrong with her!

Or me, for that matter. I'm about as far from perfect as anyone's going to get. *beats people with his unkempt ball of hair*

In any case, mexcellent profile-y thing, Fawz. Mmm, villainy is a tasty KILLSTUFF RAWR type thing.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

And I still didn't read it. Fun.

I'll post it again, only in bold and underlined this time. And you know there are hundreds of HTML codes to blow here, and I won't stop until you read it and write a valid counterargument.
If you don't want criticism, don't make anything. No matter what you create, you'll get criticism. Not everyone in this world is a hug-happy deviantzombie, and the MINUTE you release something to the real public, you will be hit with so much hard criticism you'll break down to tears. Most people'd break down to tears, you'd probably kill yourself.
Don't think of criticism as a series of insults, think of it as a "proofread". Do you think famous authors write a book, send it in, and make millions? No! If you've ever seen a proofread book, you'll wonder how the editor could afford that much ink. Does the author say "screw you" and release the book anyway? No! They cut, copy, and paste until the book is the epitome of perfection! I've seen novels get turned into children's books during the editing process, so don't expect it to EVER be easy. But the authors know that they either listen to the editor's criticism, or hear the same thing from thousands of angry readers. There's a VERY large line between completed and completed right. Cruel criticism WON'T go away. Kind criticism is always incomplete criticism.
It's a cruel world. Learn how to twist it around your finger, or get twisted.

Originally Posted by Piccolo

If you're such a great critic, why don't you..
..criticise CT? Yeah, she's got to imperfect, too. Tell HER what's wrong with her!

Okay, I'll do that from now on. That was easy, wasn't it?

@4I: Buzzcut. Now silence.